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noah j
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since 2003-03-05
Posts 82
on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair

0 posted 2003-04-03 08:09 PM


i am alone
most--surrounded
by loved ones
they talk
talk and talk
i try, to
listen
i really do
i lie
to you
to myself
this hurts me
but you care
nothing for that
i could take your hate
i could take your love
but what i can not
and will not accept
is your indifference.

in my darkest hours
i see you
hoping for comfort
but what i get--
is one FAT
slap in the face.

the only people for me are the mad ones-mad to live, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at once--jack kerouac

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Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2003-04-04 03:59 AM


This hurts ... your words are powerful.
Hopefully things will change.
Love, Margherita

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2003-04-04 05:25 AM


This reminds me of a woman that I tried to get close to and never could...because of her indifference...James
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2003-04-05 03:05 PM


noah - this is amazing - can relate well:

but what i can not
and will not accept
is your indifference.

Awesome write . . .  xxoo


Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
4 posted 2003-04-05 03:41 PM


Ooouch! Well, I suppose a slap in the face is a far cry from showing indifference!
--but I really do understand what you are saying. Indifference kills!

Warm hugs,
EA

Startime55
Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada
5 posted 2003-04-05 03:47 PM


Pain bleeds through your words. My heart felt it all. Wonderful writing.
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