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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
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0 posted 2003-04-03 08:06 PM


My head hurts
My dreams ache
When it's your name
That falls upon my lips
I can't reach you
But I guess
That's ok
Perhaps some other
Time or maybe someday
I want to cradle your insecurities
Fall madly in love
With you
Your words
Your presence
Your aura
I want to be your friend
But I don't want to scare you away
Nor do I want to scare myself
I'm stuck somewhere between
These dreams of intuition
Filled with hope
I just don't know
If I should even bother anymore
Cause look at where
I always tend to end up
Crying, on all fours
Infront of you..
Always you..
A complete total stranger...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2003-04-03 09:04 PM


I felt this..and have known it except for the crying on all fours

M

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2003-04-03 09:23 PM


Kristie - mannn - I am watching you soar here, my friend - THIS IS AMAZING - I know this:

I want to cradle your insecurities
Fall madly in love
With you
Your words
Your presence
Your aura
I want to be your friend

amazing . . .  xxoo  

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
3 posted 2003-04-03 10:06 PM


God Kris I wish i had the words, no more crying at all please
garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-04-03 10:20 PM


Ceinwyn, this is a very emotional write
that has so much heart in it. The pain is
felt in it. And the "crying on all fours"
was a unique twist of words that I liked.
Heart Hugs,  
Ethel

dreambuilder
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since 2003-03-23
Posts 319
caddyshack
5 posted 2003-04-04 12:16 PM


My head hurts
My dreams ache
When it's your name
That falls upon my lips
I can't reach you

19 powerful words
nice write - I liked it

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