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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-04-02 12:00 PM


I think of you

and my drawn breath
telescopes
the back of my head

and turns my eyes to pools
my body is shed
       and lies tingling
on the ground
my chin
reaches craves
for the sky

        the pools overflow
making rivers
that sow
  deafness
to everything else

I am taken
      by the flood

of you

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wranx
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1 posted 2003-04-02 12:07 PM


"and turns my eyes to pools
"my body is shed
       and lies tingling
on the ground
my chin
reaches craves
for the sky"

Yes, indeed!

"I am taken
      by the flood"

Good for brian....Bad for wranx.

Bout time you got back here!!!

Ericc
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2 posted 2003-04-02 07:43 AM


This is so tender and sweet.
Great poem.
Eric

luvlorn322
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3 posted 2003-04-02 07:50 AM


that was beautiful and very well expressed, thanks for sharing
Margherita
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4 posted 2003-04-02 07:54 AM


I enjoyed this.
Margherita

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2003-04-02 10:24 AM


*I touch the screen*

gentle heart viking, I am quite taken with you

Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-04-02 04:28 PM


I am taken
      by the flood

of you

Hey nice to see you writing, and love these words miss our chats and the water too

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2003-04-02 04:30 PM


Where der heck you been?
Poet deVine
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8 posted 2003-04-02 04:45 PM



"taken"

Sounds like love to me. Enjoyed this very much.


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9 posted 2003-04-02 04:56 PM


What a wonderful way to be taken away from us. Glad you survived the flood.
vandana
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10 posted 2003-04-02 07:17 PM


enjoyed
Sunshine
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11 posted 2003-04-02 08:19 PM



Brian's home....
sigh.
Good for all of us.
Even Wranx.

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2003-04-03 12:14 PM




(nobody saw that...)

garysgirl
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13 posted 2003-04-03 12:33 PM


Brian, this is so romantic. I know she
has to love the words, especially
"I am taken by the flood of you"
So beautiful.  

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

KristieSue
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14 posted 2003-04-03 01:29 AM


wow...definitely swept away by this one.  Love it :-)

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

brian sites
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15 posted 2003-04-03 02:32 AM


DAMN!
I love you people

sorry
I exiled myself
for stupid reasons

but you guys make me
stretch out
and smile

I do feel home

and for that
I thank all of you


littlewing
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16 posted 2003-04-03 02:21 PM


Brian - this is lovely - absolutely beautiful:

taken by the flood of you . . .

Amazing write . . .  xxoo

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