Turning Away - rosepetal's challenge

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majnu

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0 posted 2003-04-01 01:35 AM

Turning Away

She turns her face away from her lord,
They have spent the day blissfully,
In each of her turns there is longing -
The joy of farther reaching repeated,
His eyes are ever upon her shimmering form -
But night is come and she rests sometime,
His thoughts can never leave her be,
And he makes her janus like - illuminating,
So they have gone on, and so they will go on,
While we, short-lived denizens of her breast,
Wander to and fro finding new ways to rejoice,
Always soaking their grace.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

[This message has been edited by majnu (04-01-2003 01:37 AM).]

passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-04-01 03:01 AM

*stunned in awe of the beauty here*

kaile

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singapore

2 posted 2003-04-01 10:51 AM

what a good response to the challenge..this reads smooth and tender and i just sat quietly, reading this a few times to soak in its beauty...

rosepetals25

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3 posted 2003-04-01 02:15 PM

Wow! This is simply amazing majnu

Just beautiful! Challange very well met, thank you for doing it

Tara

"in my field of paper flowers
and candy clouds of lullaby
i lie inside myself for hours
and watch my purple sky fly over me"
- Imaginary by Evanes

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-04-01 03:25 PM

To see the various interpretations
is a lovely way to gain insight...
a beautiful post, majnu - thank you!

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

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5 posted 2003-04-01 05:38 PM

This is just plain outstanding.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

6 posted 2003-04-01 06:51 PM

Wonderful Majnu!
Challenge very well met!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

garysgirl

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7 posted 2003-04-01 07:39 PM

Majnu, this is just beautiful.
You met the challenge very well.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

dreambuilder
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8 posted 2003-04-01 07:48 PM

read it twice - what a beautiful write

[This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-01-2003 07:48 PM).]

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

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SF Bay Area

9 posted 2003-04-01 07:54 PM

WOW!!

thanks to you all for reading my work.
the compliments are greatly appreciated.

and thanks again to rosepetals25 for a great challenge.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Nightshade

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just out of reach

10 posted 2003-04-01 07:58 PM

majnu - this is awesome! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

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