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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2003-03-31 07:51 PM





they lowered the flag today,
another mother lost her son,
on a morning where winter still remains,
flurries scattered aimlessly
graceful as white butterflies
make their way,
beneath the same sky
tainted with ashes and bloody cries,
while sprng waits patiently to have her say,

war touches home
a town or two away,
where americana shines
with litte league games,
echos of native sons past and future,
thru summer parades
as red, white and blue
and john philip sousa still play,

a mother lost her son today,
flowers and hearts in purples mood,
cross paths in death and life,
as april comes full circle again,

another mother lost her child today,
the ducks parade down strikland lane,
where one of their own lay dead,
degraded, as a roadrage kill,
tossed off to the side, such shame,

motherhen crossing, her head held high,
i didn't even hear her scream,
in procession, her remaining follow her steps,
to safety's way,
i never even heard her cry,

i close my eyes,
i wait for sleep to wash over me,
i meet my son's own smiling back at me,

he becomes every mothers son this day



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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-03-31 08:18 PM


OMG Michele - this IS stunning! WOW - every line - every verse - every comparison - quite amazing - you have outdone yourself here - truly brilliant xxoo  
Ringo
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2 posted 2003-03-31 08:38 PM


Michele,
Only a truly heartless person could read this and not be moved. You haev once again reached deeply into our souls and wrapped them around your pen.
You should consider this for the book.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2003-03-31 09:52 PM


thanks u 2, hit home today, my own hometown
ctowen
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4 posted 2003-04-01 02:55 AM


I am quite certain I heard sunshine cry today ...
   clouds of masses, parading her skies,
      joined the downpour ...

           ... and share in her dream.

  Nicely you.

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-04-01 03:52 AM



bklynboy
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6 posted 2003-04-01 07:58 AM


Very good Michele. The realism of war doesnt have the impact until it hits home. But our braves men and women have a job to do and they know the risks. Lets hope this confict is ended soon with victory. Lets stand behind our President and God bless the troops. Dont forget 9/11!!!
Margherita
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7 posted 2003-04-01 09:32 AM


You have touched me deeply with this poem, so very sensitive and beautiful, yet immensely sad.
Our sons become every mother's son ....indeed.
Love, Margherita

nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2003-04-01 09:49 AM


beautifully written, we had a touch of that yesterday too "flurries scattered aimlessly
graceful as white butterflies"
and yes, life even with death continues on...

I think this is one of your best poems, Michele.

bklynboy
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9 posted 2003-04-01 09:11 PM


In retrospect, I have to agree with you nakdthoughts this is one of her best poems. I dont think her stuff is as appreciated as some other stuff written on the board. Everybody has their own style but hers is just to be boring, predictable, or mundane. I look forward to seeing her new stuff and I hope it continues. Good Job, inkedgoddess
Jason Lyle
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10 posted 2003-04-01 09:14 PM


Boring, predictable, mundane? not how I read Micheles words by far.
Jason

garysgirl
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11 posted 2003-04-01 09:26 PM


Jason, not the way I've ever read Michele's words, either.
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Michele, this is one of the most loving and compassionate poems I've ever read. I don't think anyone could read this poem and not be touched. Thank you for sharing it with us, friend.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

BluesSerenade
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12 posted 2003-04-01 09:30 PM


Your writing is so versatile and in depth!
You hit home with this one in your own special way Michele~

Love these little treasures from you~
I hope you never stop writing girlielocks~

Martie
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13 posted 2003-04-01 09:38 PM


Michele...stunning and heart breaking!  
Aenimal
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14 posted 2003-04-01 10:33 PM


Damn mish..especially the ending..
bklynboy
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15 posted 2003-04-02 03:27 AM


Oops....sorry I meant her stuff is NEVER boring, predictable or mundane.....sometimes the brain works quicker than these poor old fingers. MY apologies to all. Your humble servant!
Sudhir Iyer
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16 posted 2003-04-02 03:47 AM


extremely well written and touching...

regards,
sudhir

JamesMichael
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17 posted 2003-04-02 05:13 AM


Your soft words touched me...James
dreambuilder
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18 posted 2003-04-03 09:07 PM


amazing - you expressed a feeling I've had for years
as a vet, when war is occuring - I find it amazing to be here - so peaceful & normal

yet I remember - the fear, pride, & honor of being on the other side

you provoke my thoughts & memories - ty

Tammy Blessing
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19 posted 2003-04-04 12:14 PM


i close my eyes,
i wait for sleep to wash over me,
i meet my son's own smiling back at me,

he becomes every mothers son this day


You have touched my heart deeply with this write! I look down at my own son,not quite 2 years old yet, and find myself crying. God Bless all our "sons" off fighting.
Tammy

Ringo
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Saluting with misty eyes
20 posted 2003-04-04 08:23 PM


Michele, after that memorial service today, this actually takes on an entirely new meaning... It was great before, however with my chaqnge in perspective, it has become absolutely beautiful in my eyes... my apologies for not seeing it before.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

lost_star
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21 posted 2003-04-05 04:00 AM


This poem realy touched me. My boyfriend is a marine serving over seas. I just hope and pray no more mothers will lose their sons or daughters. Thank you for such a wonderful poem.
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