»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #25
»
He Wore a Diaper
| Open Poetry #25 |
|
He Wore a Diaper |
|
majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
He Wore a Diaper A minute Waltz in the pale moonlight - Soft arrows guide my mateless steps The light turns liquid this night, Iguana's lair revealed to be my pool. The malamute named for Titus of Rome Sleepily raises his brow black and white, A weight above us beats like the great dome, Cats play in moon shadows and sunbeams - I can hear his train and long to ride But my courage hangs on a hair, Without it all other virtues hide; Drums beat to no avail - I am long gone. Dandia on the beach with friends, The clap of dancing sticks is louder, Infinitely more so than all the rounds he spends; Bespectacled but by God more powerful. Hai Ram! --------------------------------------------------- TY Dance! Your jokes did not help, but your name did! -majnu |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Zaheer Abbas Ali - All Rights Reserved | |||
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well, not sure I understand all of this, but it's an interesting read. Perhaps a word or two from the sponsor (think author) would enlighten me? I think I saw some dancing and cavorting on the beach.... |
||
|
GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
can't say I understand it all. But it is nonetheless an amazing and descriptive write. I do believe I also see dancing on a beach. Ah yes, beautiful. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
||
|
majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i will post an explanation later, hopefully after getting some more readers  .--------------------------------------------------- s1: t. williams' night of the iguana - "nothing human disgusts me" swimming in liquid moonlight means making love. s2: titus of rome was an aggressor, conquerer, imperialist, and mad. sound familiar? cat stevens s3: "peace train" war protest songs vs. the war drums s4: dance is cultural expression, festive, joyous, often full of friendship and harmony. hai ram: the mahatma's last words. -majnu -------------------------------------- Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet. [This message has been edited by majnu (03-30-2003 05:09 PM).] |
||
|
Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I like this even though I didn't quite get it.Well written.I will check in later for your explanation. Jason |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I understand the Dandia dancing reference, with noisey sticks and all, but still haven't figured out who/why the diaper wearing reference. Are you spoofing the dance itself...or current politics? Please enlighten me. |
||
|
Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I think I get it.... it's a longing for peace juxtaposed against the back drop of war. All the allusions you make contrast one against the other in all of your stanzas... Mahatma is Ghandi (hope I spelt him right) and his ultimate mission of peace (he's the one wearing the "diaper" and the glasses if I am not mistaken. But I kept wanting to read " I am not there in place of "long gone" (it rhymes better) is there an allusion that I missed in that choice of words. I am glad you cast some light on this poem... seems to make sense when you set the scene for us. Thank you. A very thought inspiring write indeed. Love, Light and Peace, Sherry Oh yes and it has my vote too. Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
||
|
Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
sorry, I forgot to put this one in my library.  |
||
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Hey maj - ok - I got most of it - but am caught between dancing by yourself in this moonlit pool listening to Cat Stevens with your dog at Woodstock protesting atrocities with Ghandi lol - am I close? hahahah - amazing write - cant wait to see the outcome here . . . xxoo |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing...does sound a lot like Cat Stevens. I shall return..going to vote and come back later. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
||
garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very interesting write. I also enjoyed the replies that you got. You've got my vote, too.  |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
