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GG
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since 2002-12-03
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Lost in thought

0 posted 2003-03-27 05:09 PM


‘Second to God’
I always said of you.
We peered through each others eyes
And listened for a heart beat.

A quick, knowing hug,
Last clasp,
And I turned to leave.

You called out
Before I got anywhere,
“What’s the difference,
Between you and me?”

It was that question you haunted me with.
The one that faced every fear, joy, and trial,
The one that I could hardly breathe reply…
And so I whispered.. as I turned.
And soaked the essence of the ground just until
I forced my eyes to yours.
“You’ve got confidence in me” I trembled.

I turned around again, to regain my style…
When I turned back for that smile
You were gone.

I do have confidence…
That’s where faith
Takes hold.

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-03-27 07:14 PM


Alyssa - the power in these three lines alone - I am in awe . . .

I do have confidence…
That’s where faith
Takes hold.

Exactly!  xxoo

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
2 posted 2003-03-27 07:40 PM


littlewing,
thank you very much
This is about somoene who knows me best essentially second to God, I told him he should STOP and he said pretty much God told him things about me. I said he should stop listening lol
So as I guess this might be confusing, this is just describing the insecurities I felt at being understood. And the comfort in it also.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
3 posted 2003-03-27 07:46 PM


"I do have confidence, that's where faith takes hold."---Words worth remembering!

Wonderful write, Alyssa!  

Love & Light,
EA

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
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4 posted 2003-03-27 07:59 PM


Alyssa,

Here's some more words to remember:

"and soaked the essence of the ground"

That is so cool! Love it. As I do the entire poem. Sensitive and inspritional. It's great! I just reread this and caught the difference between you and me. Wow! Courageous.

Hugs and love, Pat  


..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (03-27-2003 08:10 PM).]

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
5 posted 2003-03-27 09:59 PM


EA,
thank you so much y'know I didn't even think this poem would get more than one reply... it isn't very well written, just one of those multi meaning pieces that no one can quite understand but me. I'm glad you found some wonderful in there.

Pat,
thank you I'm one of those people who studies the ground when thinking too hard. Not too sure how much courage this shows though, the beginning of his asking me the question came from one of those all too long car rides home from church where I was vulnerable because I'd decided I couldn't fight. He reminded me he did have confidence in me.. even if I didn't on myself. Glad you enjoyed this hugs and love.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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