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chasing eyes |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I was evidently bamboozled as I stood in lamp-post immobility eyes popping out in an overwhelming ogle like tongue of a lapping dog hanging out like an act of nature with finality one could predict the impending calamity there was a war going on in the insides of my head when young lust took over and a whistle was blown and the wind brought back dreadful echoes the ever alert ears had heard the sounds almost automatically the head looked down easily ashamed of the bashfulness of youth silence tried to whisper sorry but the eyes uncontrollable they were in their lurid follow of the short skirt and they were caught like many times before but this time they travelled upwards to see the sharpness of the stare the sheerness of the glare yet they saw something new they saw the red of the face change from that of rage to one of blush quite slowly blossomed a hint of a smile with a small tilt of the head almost accepting the ‘compliment’ and that was quickly followed by a turn, a spin and a disappearing act soon the air had become empty and an inane space was created all that was left was a twinkle in my eyes and a few extra beats in my heart and Chanel N° 5 in the air my canine instincts were functioning as I inhaled wafts of her presence before shrugging off her absence and accepting my bachelorhood [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (03-27-2003 11:24 AM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sudhir Iyer - I've read many of your writings my friend, but this has to be the best or close to it. I really wish this would have been a book submission. This is stunning... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for sharing the moment. I loved the innocent desire filled with the longing need, and hence the resignation of what may never be. So good to read you Sudhir~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I'm going to agree with Bill here.. one of your best..and yes I too think it should be in the book. you have grown so much in your writing since I first read you.... that I am sometimes amazed at how well and how quickly you have learned... good stuff here... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Oh, oh .... my browser marks this as a WOWSER~ Good, really good, to read this, my friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sudhir - this is lovely - you show many sides here - lust love longing passion manhood boyhood . . . amazing write it is xxoo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir, my friend...how good to see your smile! I loved this poem...so much can happen in a small time span, in the heart. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
---if she only knew what she would be missing.... Warm hugs, my dear "canine" friend!  EA |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Chanel#5 was it? Mmmmmmm...boy that brings back memories. Sudhir, I really enjoyed this write to-day. A story well told. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...nothing like a little bit of flirting in the morning, in the evening or whenever the opportunity presents itself...James |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
oh, my, those tittillating moments shared "to a tee!" Well done!!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, the burden of the Caveman Survival Kit..... May as well have a sense of humor about it, eh? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sudhir! OH WOW!! This is the best I have seen from you! May we have more of this style please? ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sudhir, Not sure if I've read you before, but this is enough to make me want to see more of your work. Very talented in capturing what could be and possibly was a real situation. Liked the imagery. Enjoyed greatly, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sudhir, this is by far one of your best, dearest friend, I hope soon you find all you desire and are never again absent! (sigh) This is very touching, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all so very much... I have already submitted 2 for the book and thanks to all of you, both have been selected. I am glad with that. More will be one too many... Regards, Sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are even charming with your tongue hanging out! (trust me--most are NOT) this is just delightful and deserving of kisses. So...  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you O Serene One for coming here, for leaving a delightful response and for the kisses regards, sudhir |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
That was a classic. Maybe it's not always such a bad thing for guys to be called 'dogs'? LOL Nice job... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Smiling here KristieSue... Thanks... regards, sudhir |
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