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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Rashaba The black storm tears the plastic wall, where liquid eyes in huddle’s keep, a house made from the cruelty of cold and a truck or two. Forgotten the laughter child of sticks and dash of fun, for the quiet joy of steam from the cooking pot. On the barefoot path, each toe takes the rocks unnoticed, with the burden of cracks where the sky shoots darts, they are a small thing. Forgive me this blue sky. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah..Martie...your heart shows... but I will not forgive you the blue sky...for it is there if nothing else to remind us that others do not have it and we have a responsibility because we do. well done my friend... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
it is such a pleasure to read you Martie... thanks for sharing... regards, sudhir |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Beautiful writing, as always, Martie.  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Very touching, Martie. Beautifully written. *hugs*  Sunkissed. |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
a beautiful post... i particularly like this closing line : "Forgive me this blue sky." very nice! "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
As a mother, it does not surprise me at all that you want to care for the little toes... Thank you dear...your heart IS showing... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, you are the consumate poet with an empathetic and loving soul... "Forgive me this blue sky"---how incredibly poignant... Peace, Love & Light, EA |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
*exceptional* Your heart writes such tender verses, this reads like a soft caress. Hugs Martie girl. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh Martie, If I understand your poem correctly, I used to feel this way. Even when I was raising my children alone, and very low income (because it was only one income) and we were struggling just to ~survive~, I realized every time I took a shower, there were other people in this world DYING OF THIRST, and I stood there, seemingly wasting water, Between us, at least 80 (?) life-saving gallons of water daily down the drain....made me cry when I thought it...made me appreciate what we did have...made me pray for those who really suffer....for even we with the lowest incomes and difficult situations, poor health, or that of our loves ones, are still so spoiled it would seem....And, we do have a responsibility to THEM...And, I would like to think my country is TRYING to better the circumstances of the rest of the world, in many ways. This really is touching, Martie...thank you for this inadvertent reminder of how very blessed I am....I relieve my guilt by prayers of thanksgiving and let God handle the rest about which I can do nothing. ~He~ give me serenity, it never came to me by myself or my thoughts. And, usually when I don't get the peace I need, even after prayer, it means there IS something I can and should do. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I love everything you write Martie.. This is wonderful..much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sis~ Pure gold is this~ 'the quiet joy of steam from the cooking pot' *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If I tried to pick a favorite part, I'd simply be repeating the poem... for each line is priceless... but the true treasure is your heart... this is beautiful. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
On the barefoot path, each toe takes the rocks unnoticed, with the burden of cracks where the sky shoots darts, they are a small thing. Forgive me this blue sky. ================================ When I watchthe news...all I can think of is the innocent families who now know the same terror and loss that we did here on 911.... you penned to poetic grace what we are all feeling in this time... thank you for that sweet poetess  "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
In the paper this morning there was a photo of a kurdish family of refugees, living in trucks and plastic tents, which the wind ripped, and rain so sharp it must hurt. I felt guilty for the spring day outside my window. I pray for those families, as well as our soldiers, in that harsh environment. "Rashaba", means black storm. Thank you for reading and for your replies...I hope my poem causes a pause for you, as the newspaper article did for me. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you reach deeply into our hearts and minds with words that cause us to stop and think of all those that are suffering so due to so many things - if god can do anything about it I wonder why nothing gets done - guess it is up to us to do something - your words are something dear Friend - Paul |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Martie, i've read this over many times and each brings a stronger imagery...this is touching and real...hopeless and hopeful...it moved me. Rf |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I count you, as one of the best writers I have known. These jewels of yours, these words, move me every single time... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) I knew what Rashaba was before reading this and knew I was going to cry reading this by the ominous feel of the title! (big hugggsssssss) I am praying ever so much for the innocent harmed down there and I only wish we could work for peace and save everyone, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I hope my poem causes a pause for you, as the newspaper article did for me.' I was stuck in traffic today, beautiful spring day, top down on the car...and I started to get irritated because of the traffic. Then for some reason I thought of how many people would be grateful to have such complaints. So, yes...certainly a pause and more Martie. |
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