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Death Becomes Me - A Duet by serenity & littlewing

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littlewing
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0 posted 03-27-2003 03:19 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for littlewing


"Death Becomes Me"
    A Duet by Serenity & Littlewing



Streaks of gray upon white stone
tracing every finger feel
eyes dancing on the lines
secrets gasping to be revealed

but I know - yes, I do recall . . .

An angel dancing every step
jumping from measure to rest
like the first time the pitter patter rang true
the chiming of the "me" to "you"

The note that is the most obscure
is the one that sounds the PEEL
I feel
a concerto in heaven
resounding in my heart

still we remain apart . . .

Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone
smelling of starch and yearning for home
breath caught in the wind
carried like lavendar on morning breeze

yes, I have found my path with ease...

Upon the stone fingers trace back to you
shades of gray on white are blue
lost but for here - my soul eternal blessed
just like all the rest . . .

and I forgot to buy flowers

I always forget the flowers . . .




[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (03-27-2003 04:22 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-27-2003 04:44 AM       View Profile for Ringo   Email Ringo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ringo

"Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone
smelling of starch and yearning for home"
This is one of the more interesting lines you have posted yet.

"and I forgot to buy flowers
I always forget the flowers . . ."
Definately something a man would say lol.

You ladies have done a very nice job here. I look forward to more.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

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2 posted 03-27-2003 06:41 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

You two did a very good job with this piece.....well done!!

Charisma
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A new dynamic duo -
an amazing duet!
Do it again!
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Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone
smelling of starch and yearning for home
breath caught in the wind
carried like lavendar on morning breeze

yes, I have found my path with ease...

Upon the stone fingers trace back to you
shades of gray on white are blue
lost but for here - my soul eternal blessed
just like all the rest . . .

and I forgot to buy flowers

I always forget the flowers . . .
==============================


stunning "insyncness"
is that a word?  tis now!!
so lovely me ladies...hauntingly lovely.
mothyme

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel

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5 posted 03-27-2003 08:06 AM       View Profile for Ericc   Email Ericc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ericc

Wow...a work of art.
Eric
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6 posted 03-27-2003 08:10 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Sue and Karen....  

Another, please?

Heart hugs to both of you         
Ethel
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Brad:  heheheh - that was both of us there at the end . . . go figure - thank you

Charisma - am glad you liked!

Sunshine - dynamic duo - hehehe TY - more like wondertwin powers activate . . . form of . . .  lol thank you

Janet - hauntingly lovely = yes . . . it is - thank you so much!

Ericc - so sweet your words - art . . . arent we all?  

Ethel:  thank you - hehehe took a week to get this one out . . .  hugs back to you - my friend thank you so much

Thanks guys xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-27-2003 11:24 AM).]

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"Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone
smelling of starch and yearning for home
breath caught in the wind
carried like lavendar on morning breeze

yes, I have found my path with ease...

Upon the stone fingers trace back to you
shades of gray on white are blue
lost but for here - my soul eternal blessed
just like all the rest . . .

and I forgot to buy flowers

I always forget the flowers . . ."

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Fantastic!!!  I love it!!
I do hope we see more of the likes of this
from the two of you!!
~Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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9 posted 03-27-2003 09:00 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Quite a deed girls. I enjoyed reading it and ....rereading it.
Love and my compliments.
Margherita
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Nancy - thank you - this was an interesting eve . . .  hehehehe  . . .

Margherita -  yes - this one DOES take an extra read now doesnt it  lol - look at he last lines - closely . . . thank you xxoo
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11 posted 03-27-2003 09:46 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Applause from me to Sue.

Thank you sweet lady--this was fun, and I really enjoyed the spark of your muse here.

and thank all the good poet people for your generosity of praise and encouragment.

sheesh...I sound like a speechwriter now.



I'm outta here.

to Sue!
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12 posted 03-27-2003 09:52 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

great work...

more?

regards,
sudhir
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13 posted 03-27-2003 10:08 AM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

An angel dancing every step
jumping from measure to rest
like the first time the pitter patter rang true
the chiming of the "me" to "you"


Excellent write!!! More please?  Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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14 posted 03-27-2003 10:32 AM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

littlewing - oh my, a most stunning duet by two gifted writers. This is excellent. Now if I could entice to do a duet together, wellllllllllll....

BC
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A dynamite duet!  ---and the readers chant, "We want more! We want more!"  

Peace, Love & Light to you both!
Linda

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LittleWing and Serenity~
A truly remarkable blend-of-ink from two awesome poets~
Greatly enjoyed this read~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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This is an incredible duet, you blended perfectly.
Sandra
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Congrats to you my spark of Serenity  . . .
an evening errr . . .  morning well worth staying up to greet the sun  . . . speechwriter huh?  . . .

Hugs Back xxoo

Sudhir & Chris - thank you so much - so sweet . . .

Linda - hahahahah - what is this a concert?  TY

Marge - humbled by your words  . . . TY

Bill - I would be most honored  . . .

Catalina - coming from you - means much - like that - a perfect blend TY

Thanks guys xxoo

  

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-27-2003 11:49 AM).]

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19 posted 03-27-2003 11:42 AM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

I enjoyed the entire poem
but the words in italics were
especially meaningful to me.

Kudos ladies~
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20 posted 03-27-2003 11:50 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

littlewing and serenity....Rich wording and melding of two...the last line, poignant.
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Hey Blue - I didnt even see that until you pointed it out TY - that alone is an entirely new poem hmmmm . . . .

Martie - the last line lmao - was just - it just had to be - ya know?  xxoo  
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beautiful...

"An angel dancing every step
jumping from measure to rest
like the first time the pitter patter rang true
the chiming of the "me" to "you""

one of the countless passages i'd want to quote...
Its very good


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23 posted 03-27-2003 12:48 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice...James
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awesome piece! wow!
 
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