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The Beams

Wood beams,
a simple form,
one standing, one across;
in that time and place any two
might serve, and this building has so many,
each beam set strong, dedicated
to that very same task;
a church, built from
wood beams.
© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-24-2003 12:35 AM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

there are a lot of symbolic lines within this, I find it to be very deep......

Lauren~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

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Thank you, Greeneyes. It is so hard to avoid cliches when writing on a theme like this, and I was afraid I'd fall into that trap.

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3 posted 03-24-2003 12:48 AM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

you didnt!!!!

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

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Rat - I got so much out of this - sometimes I go too deep but to me it gave me the impression of the foundation - you know - of it all - especially now.  
nicely done xxoo
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You're doin fine work in these structured writes....I don't have the discipline to even attempt them...Gads! It's all I can do to keep what I DO write from runnin' all over hell and gone.

This is a good in any form, dude.
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Hi Ed,
You know that I like this form.  LOL
But, I also like the content, too.
It made me think of the foundation
of a Church, and not just the building.
Very good.  

Hugs,
Ethel
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The foundation of this rictameter is rock solid!  

Peace & Light,
EA
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Ed...So simple to build something strong!  
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Ed,

Smiling at Earth Angel's (Linda) reply. True. I was so into the content I didn't even notice the form of rictameter.  Enjoy your talent and thank you for sharing it here, with us.

Hugs, Pat

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wow!
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The subtlety makes your message all the more powerful... This is superb!
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