Deafening Silence (another rictameter)

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garysgirl

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0 posted 2003-03-20 06:16 PM

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Silence
Quiet stillness
A stillness felt by both
Causes Chill to be in the air
This type of silence has very loud sound
So loud that it is deafening
Hurting between ones ears
Very painful
Silence
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Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-03-20 07:31 PM

Wonderful Ethel!!
You manage to do these so effortlessly!
Beautifully penned.
~Hugs~

~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-03-20 07:54 PM

I cannot hear anything now! I have gone deaf from the thundering silence!

Peace & Love,
Linda

garysgirl

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3 posted 2003-03-20 08:43 PM

Thank you, Nancy Lee.
I guess you can tell
that I like these. LOL

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

garysgirl

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4 posted 2003-03-20 08:47 PM

Linda,

Thank you for reading and
replying, Earthey Angel.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

WhiteRose
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5 posted 2003-03-20 09:10 PM

These just seem to flow from your heart with such ease. Very nicely done.

Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-03-20 09:57 PM

I have known this deafening silence..you captured it well Ethel

garysgirl

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7 posted 2003-03-20 10:02 PM

Anne, thank you. I'm really
glad that you liked it.....

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

garysgirl

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8 posted 2003-03-20 10:03 PM

Raph, I really hate this kind of
silence, don't you?

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-21-2003 12:43 AM).]

kayjay
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9 posted 2003-03-21 01:02 AM

I have enjoyed of these two you have done. I'll have to think about that. (I'm afraid to wander too far from rhyme and meter...ssshhhhhh!)

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Ratleader

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10 posted 2003-03-21 01:05 AM

Woo, garysgirl pounds it out! Very nice -- captured the moment beautifully. These things like you.

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littlewing
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11 posted 2003-03-21 05:03 AM

Ethel - amazing - ahhh that feeling of electricity in the air before a storm . . . despise that - you are really good at these!
xxoo

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12 posted 2003-03-22 07:08 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Ethel, this is so very heartaching, sweet friend, I don't like silence either as it can be so deafening and I wish for your heart to always be spoken back to with love and comfort! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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vandana

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13 posted 2003-03-22 07:48 PM

enjoyed it a lot

SimplyGold
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14 posted 2003-03-23 10:43 AM

Garysgirl,

This is really cool. You do this so well.
What are the dynamices around this style?

Keep them coming.

SG

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

15 posted 2003-03-23 10:47 AM

Remember the question?
When the time comes,
this would be one of 'em...

garysgirl

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16 posted 2003-03-23 11:16 AM

Ken,
Thank you. I see that you posted
a free verse today. It is very good.

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Ed,
Thank you! You know that I
really appreciate your comments!

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Sue,
thank you so much. You
are so sweet.

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Noah,
yeah, I hate that kind of silence....
Now, there are  some silences
that are very  clear....
the love silences. I like that kind.

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Vandana,
I'm really glad that you enjoyed
the poem.

garysgirl

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17 posted 2003-03-23 11:27 AM

SimplyGold,
This is the form that's in Nan's Poetry Workshop Forum for March. As far as I know they're mainly syllable count....unlike the cinquain and haiku.

The rictameter has 9 lines, with the first and last line being the same two syllables (word or words).

The syllable count is:
1st line    2 syllables
2nd line    4
3rd line    6
4th line    8
5th line    10
6th line    8
7th line    6
8th line    4
9th line    2 syllables

I hope this helps.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

garysgirl

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18 posted 2003-03-23 11:29 AM

Karilea,
THANK YOU!!!!

I really appreciate it...
if the time might come.....

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

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