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Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2003-03-20 05:21 PM

I found a broken body on the steps,
with shattered wings and feathers all awry.
I found his broken body on the steps,
but where shall I look for his broken mind?
A broken shadow tangled in the nets,
it beats and flutters, trying hard to fly.
A crippled flower captured in the nets,
but all that makes a man was left behind.
Wild beasts attack and suffer no regrets,
no misty teardrops and no whispered sigh.
How would a beast know ought of soft regret
when pity runs through men like watered wine?
A wine-red stain upon the broken steps,
a shattered shadowed beast that I can’t find.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2003-03-20 09:25 PM

How would a beast know ought of soft regret
when pity runs through men like watered wine?

This is just awesome. I don't like to use that word, it almost sounds cliche, but this is really just awesome.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2003-03-21 10:27 AM

Thanks, White Rose.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2003-03-25 01:09 PM

Pilgrimage~

'but where shall I look for his broken mind?'

A twinge of poignancy in this line~
Thoughtfully penned~

Good to see you gal~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-03-25 01:18 PM

A tender and thoughtful write by a tender and thoughtful person of the pilgrim variety!

Warm hugs,
EA

pearl6884
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 72
California coast

5 posted 2003-03-25 01:48 PM

This is wonderful and amazing and everything else good!

*To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...*
-Blake

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2003-03-25 06:41 PM

How would a beast know ought of soft regret
when pity runs through men like watered wine?

wow, this is you at your finest.

wonderfully written and an easy flow to it
hugss Nan of the Pilgrim variety

M

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2003-03-26 02:47 PM

Thanks, guys, you're all so nice!

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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