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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-03-20 05:01 AM


Dawn down passing
through a curlicue
of velvetizing
traffic
life in color
of fig-puce
bleeding
through the sea
foam leaves
begging, chewing sand,
and piece
of ruts
and stuff--
these memories
of us,
brushing
the rocks away
in the leave
of the salt waves
kelp--between the prints of us--

as if there was a difference...

smiling as I'm washed away
walking in the foam....


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-20-2003 05:07 AM).]

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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-03-20 05:45 AM


When I read your words - a silent melody plays inside and I close my eyes to a canvass - plain parched . . . foreboding -
only to open them seconds later to a kaleidoscope of wonder . . .

as if there was a difference...

like a dart in a bullseye K - just the right punch - truly amazing - xxoo    

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2003-03-20 05:46 AM


meet me on yahoo?
littlewing
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3 posted 2003-03-20 05:50 AM


i sent you an invite silly
gemjop
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4 posted 2003-03-21 06:05 AM


yeah what sue said... karen,  yer a kick ass poetess y know?
especially loved the last 4 lines.
love gem xxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Sunshine
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5 posted 2003-03-21 01:43 PM



I walked through this
yestermorn...
came back again...
because you do
make a difference...

Thomas119gold
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since 2002-06-03
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6 posted 2003-03-21 08:16 PM


Nice write
you have a way with expressing written words
Thomas

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2003-03-21 08:25 PM


giggling at the "kick ass poetess"

Izzat an official Passions title?

HA! grin...but thank you...

gotta get me a t shirt now, so I'll be legit, huh?

OH, but ya made me smile wide with that!


Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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8 posted 2003-03-21 08:26 PM


Gorgeous, your poetry is exquisite and the imagery packed filled in this delicate piece is brilliant.

absolutely smashing

Maree.

p.s adding to my library.

rosepetals25
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9 posted 2003-03-21 10:11 PM


I have to agree with gemjop, the last four lines were wonderful! A beautiful ending to a great poem

Tara

"wake me up inside
call my name and save me from the dark"
-Bring Me To Life by Evanescence

WhiteRose
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10 posted 2003-03-21 10:30 PM


and piece
of ruts
and stuff--
these memories
of us,
brushing
the rocks away
in the leave
of the salt waves

Yep, this is you. Your poetry is unique, and always written in your oh so sassy style. And of course, I adore it. Every single word.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
11 posted 2003-03-22 12:15 PM


Yeah. Kick-ass. Yeah, dass right! Dass right!

Nice one witch

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-03-22 12:23 PM


Hey Kare?
Guess what?? Yep!!
Ditto to what everybody
else said!!!  LOL  
(BTW, ALL  your poetry is  excellent,
and this one is  NO exception.)

Very, very good, little Witchey One....

Love and Heart Hugs,
Ethel

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