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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
So sweet she is Her dark caress Taking more and leaving less And here I am An empty shell Weak and left to rot in hell So sweet her kiss Its bitterness Black leather ,and tenderness And here I am Tired, so tired Torn and broken Uninspired |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Great write Jason not bad at all for someone uninspired |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Sounds inspired to me. Very nicely done.  |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Jason, this is a very well-written poem. I really liked the ryhme, too.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Almost like lyrics, this is. I like it... Her dark caress Taking more and leaving less good line, and I like the flow of it all! the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Salt New Member
since 2003-03-19
Posts 9 |
Nice post, especially for someone who is without inspiration.. Peace |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jason - this is amazing - many times pain inspires us the most . . . xxoo |
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