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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-03-19 02:43 PM

I've
played both sides
for quite some time now

Slipped easily
into guise of demon
but played the part
of angel too

Comforted by Hesse's
hope and spirit
but disgruntled
by its futility in Heller's '22

Felt the warmth
of life's embrace
and the cold hand
of death's loom

Known the power
of creating something
and the weakness
to let it be destroyed

I have known all
these and many more
and perhaps its time
to choose one side

The choice of
life instead
of this...
this slow decay

To plant the
roots and anchor

or risk the further drift of me

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The photograph above is an edited version of Jerry N. Uelsmann's floating tree. This poem was inspired both by Uelsmanns picture as well as Lyra's passing. Death has a way of reminding one to LIVE.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-03-19 02:48 PM

This piece is sheer brilliance!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-03-19 02:49 PM

Raph - this is the most beautiful thing you have ever written - I am just sitting here in awe of you - I am so proud of you - happy tears - fly sweety . . . xxoo

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-03-19 02:54 PM

Lyra would not only be pleased by your words,
but by the photo as well...

I thank you for this...
and for everything you have read today.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-03-19 02:56 PM

Raph..you ask for honesty in your critique line.

this poem in many ways reflects honesty..and heart...

a wonderful piece for many reasons.

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

5 posted 2003-03-19 03:01 PM

just when i think i have read your best...

to me, this poem is a huge reflection of personal growth, and the person you are.

i'm in total awe, and don't really have the words to say what i want to, so m friend, i'm nodding and smiling at another of one of my favourite poets creations.

love gem xxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2003-03-19 03:03 PM

Methinks you are choosing well! One can see more clearly in the Light than in the Dark...

Love & Light,
Earth Angel

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-03-19 03:17 PM

Brad thanks you deeply

Sue thanks angel I'm trying

Thank you as always Karilea you replies always are always warm and thoughtful

Cpat you are too kind, always appreciate when you stop in

Gemma thanks and you know you're one of my favs no doubt. Personal growth? I don't know ask me next week when i go back into writing from my shadowy shell grin

Thanks Linda maybe with spring looming I'll spend a little more time in said light

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2003-03-19 03:45 PM

I like the duality of this,
and the moorings coming apart
and falling together again.

Stella was a diver and she was always down.
Interpol

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2003-03-20 09:35 AM

Dear Raffaele, I am touched by this beautiful creation of yours. You choose life. Duality will always exist, but your wisdom grows and you'll be able to tend more to the light than to the darkness.
E tanti auguri ancora per il tuo compleanno di qualche giorno fa! Sei un grande Pesci!
Un abbraccio.
Margherita

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

10 posted 2003-03-20 04:31 PM

Hey Raph...this is good stuff m'friend...quiet, thoughtful...a pleasure to read

well done

K

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2003-03-20 04:46 PM

Hey Raph,

This is the most beautiful poem of yours I
have read. Friend, you are saying a lot more
here than you may even realize yourself.

BTW, Raph, I'm glad that you're leaning
in the direction that you are.......

Heart Hugs to you,
Ethel

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

12 posted 2003-03-20 05:28 PM

I dont think I have read any one as deep, yet as 'sensitive' as you.....your words are simply amazing.....

L~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2003-03-20 05:45 PM

Raph..Thoughtfilled and possitive poem and wonderful picture to go with it. Enjoyed!

meek scorpion
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since 2003-03-12

Posts 9
margaritaville

14 posted 2003-03-20 07:55 PM

outstanding writing - almost painful to read as I can relate all to well - & btw your precedeing reputation as an excellent writer is obviously well warrented, I'm very impressed.

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

15 posted 2003-03-20 08:27 PM

exactly!! I had to edit..sounded corny..but had to keep the kissy face

I'm having one of those deja vu moments..like damn this is what I was feeling but couldn't put it into words you did that for me..thank you...love it...obviously..what more can I say..
If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

16 posted 2003-03-20 08:41 PM

soon ...your roots will deepen soil...h

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

17 posted 2003-03-20 08:51 PM

This is excellent! Wonderful writing to say the least.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

18 posted 2003-03-20 09:43 PM

Thank squirrel I appreciate it it just sort of came together that way..sometimes you just got to let if flow

Margherita and I am touched by your always kind words e per gli auguri. Un abbracio e un baccio
Raffaele

Thanks K, always a nice to see you

Ethel thanks as always for your support, you're too sweet

Lauren your replies always make me smile, thank you very much

Thanks Martie love that pic though it's quite altered from the original

Meek scorpion thanks

Kris I'm just always glad to see you smile

1slick that's the plan, thanks for the read

WhiteRose that's saying alot thanks you kindly!

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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

19 posted 2003-03-20 10:25 PM

if the tree floats away, whats gonna keep me
rooted to anything of permanence?

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

20 posted 2003-03-20 10:39 PM

Mish start planting the roots anchors away

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

21 posted 2003-03-21 12:17 PM

...the paradox of life... As above, so below, my friend...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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