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My Demise
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My Demise |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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It moves ever so slightly thrusting deeper still . . . blood pooled puddled and sticky and I stare at it and don't even want to clean it up These hands bear the mark creases stained wrinkled and red bleeding like Jesus did Yet, when I hang my head in sorrow there it lie within my pale and shaking hands MY DEMISE |
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TaureauRouge Junior Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 26A mass of land between two oceans |
"Without fear, there is no death"-Leo Tolstoy We all wonder on our demise especially after a lifetime of learning about how mortal other people are. This piece is very provoking which is good. Nice write. "I should have been a pair of ragged claws/ Scuttling over the floors of silent seas"-T.S. Eliot |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Forlorn with stigmata...You bleed out in this. "The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable" |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
T - thank you for your comments - meee?? thought provoking - Ed - was a weak moment - always good to see you reading me - actually quite honored . . . TY guys xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very intense |
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meek scorpion New Member
since 2003-03-12
Posts 9margaritaville |
Yet, when I hang my head in sorrow there it lie - and there lies your beauty and grace - ive read much of your poetry - & im deeply impressed - you have a wonderful mind - i look forward to reading more of your writing [This message has been edited by meek scorpion (03-19-2003 04:21 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you shadows meek - what beautiful words you have for me - made me smile - thank you - hope you enjoy it here as much as I do - xxoo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Powerful! It stirred something within. No end, without a new beginning though! Love, Margherita |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Sue, this is a very intense write. In fact, it hurts. Hope all is well, friend.....  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Your head and life are always in your hands, enjoyed. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
My mind can't help but roll those words back and forth listening to what they say to me This is different but in a way that I can't help to want to read it again COOL WRITE Thomas |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Margherita - yes no ending - no beginning - my life - go figure . . . Ethel: sorry was a weak moment there . . . I am fine - just my warped mind forcing my hand to write what it wants - grrrr . . . TY xxoo SY - yes I know - just wondering what I am to do with it now . . . Thomas - very nice reply - am glad you can relate -thats what I strive for . . . Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-19-2003 10:25 AM).] |
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Silver_Tryst Member
since 2003-03-10
Posts 64MT |
Powerful, Nice Write |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
whoa were did this come from?? awesome sue. and what have you done to your pic?? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Tryst - thank you Raph - this came from last night - i dont know . . . and my pic *crying* I didnt do that - Im taking it away - I look like Scarface . . . |
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Little_One Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 34montana |
Good job...I like it Kristin |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
where are you. messenger on the fritz again? |
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Salt New Member
since 2003-03-19
Posts 9 |
We hold little in our hands but the possiblity of life and death. Nice post! Peace |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kristen - TY so much for reading me Salt - yes we do - so little . . . Raph - msn msn what can I say - it speaks for itself . . . xxoo |
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