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Open Poetry #25

seventeen in three (#5)

wandering glider
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since 2001-04-04

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aloft

0 posted 2003-03-18 10:16 PM

Hanging on ‘till spring

bladdernut rattles in wind

Field mouse waits below

[This message has been edited by wandering glider (03-19-2003 11:56 AM).]

TaureauRouge
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since 2002-06-01

Posts 26
A mass of land between two oceans

1 posted 2003-03-19 01:36 AM

Intrigueing write. Ironic how the shortest poems are usually the most complex. I never thought about the anticipation of a mouse for a nut to fall. Good

[This message has been edited by TaureauRouge (03-19-2003 01:38 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

2 posted 2003-03-19 04:09 AM

like it!

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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3 posted 2003-03-19 09:39 AM

Oh, very nice! Clean, spare, subtle. That's the best way, and you really did it right with this one.

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