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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2003-03-18 02:35 PM


It doesn't hurt much,
really.
The sun is black fire.
The tide in my blood.
Blood cauterized
by the blast
of black fire.

It doesn't hurt much,
really.
The city can be rebuilt.
The streets can be repaved.
The cars can be removed
from the rubble
of the city.

We can raise our arms,
as the skies burn,
as the ground crumbles
to the finest of bone-dust
and silt.
We can raise our arms
and pray

that these idealogical constructs,
that brought machines to feast on our young,

will stay here long enough
to clear away the black sunspots,
so that we may burn
all the more cleanly.

I've seen this happen
in other people's lives.
Now it's happening in mine.

The Smiths

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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-03-18 03:04 PM


pretty powerful images..and read you discussion with Ron..s I know where it came from...

enjoyed the talent Mike...


Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-03-18 03:19 PM


nicely done!
Ericc
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3 posted 2003-03-18 03:30 PM


Yes...very powerful.
Eric

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2003-03-18 03:43 PM


Nice writing...James
bsquirrel
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5 posted 2003-03-18 04:32 PM


Thank you.

Stella was a diver and she was always down.
Interpol

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-03-18 07:44 PM


Mike - loved this the first time I read it - very powerful and well said - as always xxoo
waldopepper
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7 posted 2003-03-18 09:05 PM


I enjoyed your words my friend.  I am new to this site, this being my 2nd official response.  I plan to take the advice of Ron and will read and respond a while before posting poetry of my own.

It sounds like a message of being "remade" through the process of destruction.  An interesting and paradoxical premise.  

I also believe that prayer never hurts.  

WhiteRose
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8 posted 2003-03-18 09:15 PM


Wow Mike, this is incredible. Really powerful stuff.

oh, and I like the new pic

bsquirrel
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9 posted 2003-03-19 11:44 AM


Glad you all enjoy. And welcome, w. You should like it here fine.
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