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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Sparrow Perching On the yard wall, And she’ll fly if I move. For sparrows, terror makes the rules. My freezing here will change nothing for her, Fear and flight hard wired responses, Nothing to her or me. Still I hold here, Perching. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...If I spoke Sparrow, I'd tell him how gentle you are. Liked this thought...can see you being so still, even hardly breathing.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
been perched in that same position, fearing move or to cause that sparrow fly |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ed, So well writtn; I like this line: "fear and flight hard wired responses" and I personally remain perched, perfectly still because I so enjoy just watching them be a bird.... In any case the content ~almost~, but not quite took away realization this is a very specific form of poetry writing. Glad you shared both with us. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, a beautiful rictameter. I love the form and the words.  Hugs, Ethel  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I liked how you used the sparrow to convey the message, that some things are better left alone. Very clever and insightful writing~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Cleaver write, enjoyed the read. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This is wonderful...deep and beauty filled. Eric |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I love the picture-and such good form, too. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hi Ed Another well written piece which I really enjoyed. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I know this, but with a face like mine its not movement that scares animals away..or children..or women..lol |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, this is so precious. You really showed your sensitive side with this one! Peace & Light, EA |
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