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Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

0 posted 2003-03-17 05:39 PM

By force opposed, the summoner,
enlists to his command,
the mightiest within his ranks,
to make a final stand.

The valiant and the honor bound,
to flank him side by side.
No fearsome dogs of war are these,
set loose on country-side.

Brave men pay tribute to their cause,
determined to be just.
They speak to us of higher laws
in which we place our trust.

Combined, their efforts can amass
the greatest force of all,
the strength to do what's right before
our folly kills us all.

To summon reason, they implore,
we give them half a chance.
One hopes words might avert all wars,
the only proper stance.

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (03-17-2003 05:59 PM).]

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

1 posted 2003-03-17 05:48 PM

reading 1: boring

reading 2: interesting

reading 3: nice rhyme, lyrical in its semi rythm

reading 4: into my library

it grew on me, really.
the simple language and loose form truly speak to the subject. even though you don't mention them I can just see throngs of simple people - farmers, students, working joes, etc., lining up.

btw, it is valiant

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

2 posted 2003-03-17 05:58 PM

majnu,
Thanks friend, both for the comments and the correction. Indeed, simple thoughts, simple words, simple phrasing( it's not meant to be rocket science), I'm glad you took the time to see through it.
Doc

Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

3 posted 2003-03-17 06:23 PM

I don't lean towards rocket science anyway..
I thought you handled the subject well...rhythm and all.

~A~

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

4 posted 2003-03-17 07:34 PM

It wiould be a better world should words be enough. Unfortunatly...
Having been there, I can honestly tell you that the thoughts and hearts of America's fighting men and women are perfectly portrayed within. There is definately a reason for you to continue writing.

~You might say I'm a Dreamer, but I'm not the only one...
John Lennon

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

5 posted 2003-03-18 05:40 PM

Alicethruglass,
LOL @ your reply( neither do I, the darn things kept blowing up in my face!).Thanks for the kind words.
Doc
Ringo,
Thank you. Unfortunately, the last resort is too often the only one. My heart is with those who will suffer because of it.
Doc

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