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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-03-17 11:38 AM



Cloudburst
thunder
thoughts asunder

falling upon my face
A kiss from Heaven


mingled with
one
lone
tear
escaping
these eyes of mine

They once did smile

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-17-2003 11:41 AM).]

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-03-17 11:41 AM


Small but mighty! Very effective in creating the visuals and the mood.

~ Remember, sunny days are coming!

Warm hugs,
EA

Aenimal
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2 posted 2003-03-17 11:45 AM


This aches but it's so beautiful
Jason Lyle
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3 posted 2003-03-17 11:50 AM


I like this alot.
Jason

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-03-17 01:48 PM


Earth - hey - you wished the sun here didnt you?  It is shining so bright now  . . .

Raph - thank you sweety - I have no idea what brought this one on - just pictured a rainfall . . .

Jason - thank you so much

xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-17-2003 01:48 PM).]

Little_One
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5 posted 2003-03-17 04:16 PM


Hey little wings, I loved the poem....I will be looking for you just as you will be looking for me.

My eyes have seen the cries
My eyes have seen the tears
But my heart will be there untill the end
To help calm all your fears


Kristin

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-03-17 04:30 PM


Kristen - thank you . . .   xxoo
inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2003-03-17 11:02 PM




cry in the rain,
weep with the clouds,
true love existing
behind the moons shrouds


Enchantress
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8 posted 2003-03-17 11:15 PM


Very very lovely...much enjoyed this tonight.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Silver_Tryst
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9 posted 2003-03-17 11:43 PM


Littlewing, what can i say, another beautiful write

Shayne

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10 posted 2003-03-18 12:13 PM


Sue, this is beautiful, but sad. I hope that your eyes smile again very soon.
Hugs,
Ethel

littlewing
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11 posted 2003-03-18 01:00 AM


Michele - what a beautiful response TY so much

Nancy Shayne & Ethel - you guys are much to good to me xxoo thank you truly

passing shadows
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12 posted 2003-03-18 03:50 AM


I like this kind of writing...very good
littlewing
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13 posted 2003-03-18 01:45 PM


thanks shadows - hehehe can always count on you xxoo
Ericc
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14 posted 2003-03-18 03:33 PM


Oh wow...this is so bitter sweet.
Lovely writing.
Eric

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15 posted 2003-03-18 03:47 PM


nice tight writing... and the mix of nature and emotion well done..

I enjoyed

JamesMichael
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16 posted 2003-03-18 04:22 PM


Very nice...James
j0n4th4n
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17 posted 2003-03-18 04:27 PM


an exiting poem!
Chanson
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18 posted 2003-03-18 06:02 PM


This is a little gem of a poem
with a bright shine.
I like I like. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

jellybeans
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19 posted 2003-03-18 06:34 PM


wonderful.....sigh.....wonderful.....love this
littlewing
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20 posted 2003-03-18 07:42 PM


Ericc - thanks so much - bittersweet yes . . .

C- glad you enjoyed - yes trying to keep them tight

James - thank you

Jon - means a lot - TY

Dorene - I like I like your response TY

jelly - thank you so much - ahhh sigh yess perfect

xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-18-2003 07:42 PM).]

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