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Shamrocks & Fishes (oh joyous day)
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Shamrocks & Fishes (oh joyous day) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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Another year scratched into wall of mortal cell Shamrocks and fishes offer little solace when emerald fields lay dead in drought too far removed to swim in ocean embrace another orbit another ring of tree another reminder how far away I am from me [This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-18-2003 12:37 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Another year scratched into wall of mortal cell" wow... Is THIS yer birthday??? (well it's how I feel about MINE...)  again...geez. I understand. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like the honesty of this poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: I do know how you feel - after 20 they all just meshed into each other. This line: how far away I am from me You are closer than you think . . . xxoo As always - leaving me speechless with your words (oh and you can hit me later - I promise: Happy Birthday! [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-17-2003 12:51 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"another ring of tree" love the ending Raph...an awesome piece |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
did you at least get to blow? (candles) out at all today? no party hat or pin the tail on the donkey? |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
how far away I am from me Wish I had wrote that line, nice. Jason |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Just another day in paradise but hey, it's all yours! Blowing you every good wish Raph~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks for the responses everyone glad you liked..to answer questions that were asked mishy..no. Stayed home mostly did nothing and grumbled about it all day in the dark, curtains closed |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God you are miserable now arent you lmao - snap out of it already . . . ya I know . . shaddup . . . |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm coming to spank you for your whiney attitude!  it should be fun for one of us |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA - sorry had to come back and laugh at that - |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling)... sometimes all we want to do is whine when it comes birthday time... happy birthday bud... and you know..they all just blend together after while.. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like this one, especially the last five lines. Creative and evocative both. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue please really shaddup already Kacy I'm usually the spanker not the spankee..oh um..not that i go for that sort of thing.. Sue you just can't can yu lol Thanks Cpat appreciate it and yes they blend much like sewage Thanks pilgramage I liked the weight of ending too thanks |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
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Etain Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 92The moon... |
I liked it. Greetings... Etain. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU HAPPY BIRTHDAY DEAR RAPHEY HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOUUUUUU! . . . Heartey Birthday Hugs, Ethel Sorry!! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I'm late too Oh Happy Birthday to you belated, outdated but true, a sincere Birthday wish just for you.  |
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