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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Ashes Embered ~*Marge Tindal*~ ~So cold Ashes embered Wind shan’t blow them to life Sooted stir of memoried flame Cannot breathe life into them once again Dead the recall of love so warm Long before chilling storm Took you away So cold~ Deeply within Iced-heart of never mend All alone in the dark of night Fingertip tracings cannot find the light Embered flame extinguished into Ashen thoughts still of you Exhaled recall So cold~ Queen of deny No more quilting of love For you are gone so far my dove Away from these arms that longingly ache How many times must a heart break Before the lesson’s learned Love dies … slow burn So cold~ Fireplaced recall Offers no comforting Embrace of this body in need Aloneness consumes each moment of time The only arms I feel are mine Reaching out to touch you So far away So cold~ Now I lay down This claim to past desire Full realize … there is no fire To warm me on this cold, cold night Never has this love, so wrong, been so right Tears-in-fall drown all of the sheep Jumping fences of weep I’m left to cry So cold~ Ricta-Cinco-Meter For my friend, Vicky~ A little project from the Poetry Workshop Forum |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Marge! So poignant, this! And the repetition of "cold" drives this home. As always, nice to see you and your work! Cor |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If I said "show off" with a smile, would you laugh?  This is marvelous, Marge! Not only is the poem fantastic, but the work that went into it Margilicious! I surely hope you're not expecting that from all of us, but it would make a heck of a month if you were! Brava!! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Tears-in-fall drown all of the sheep Jumping fences of weep I’m left to cry So cold~ You have outdone yourself with this masterpiece my friend! Brilliant, just brilliant. Huggles, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ Thank you, sweet lady, for coming in with such beautiful thoughts~ I appreciate you~ Shiner~  ... yeppers, I can !Thankee lady~ Tickle me fancy ... ya' do~ MartiGal~ And from you ... the sweetest of the sweet~  See ... my lil buddy, Vicky and I have this 'egg us on' challenge thingie~ Now SHE OWES ME ONE ... or two or Heaven forbid ... a SIX-PACK stack of Rictameters~ Get thee to the Poetry Workshop for a go at this months lessons ! It's really mucho-funo ! Thanks my friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Marge~ All I can say is "WOW" I have trouble writing one and you give us five. You make it look so easy, but I know this was written by a great poetess. If Only? Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge/sis...there is so much emotional pull to this poem that I had to go back to see the fabulous form.  |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Very very nice work. And the way you made each stanza symmetrical is just plain awe inspiring. ~You might say I'm a Dreamer, but I'm not the only one... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Wow Marge! I like the way you did this. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW and I haven't even started mine and you give us five in a row! Well what ya expect from a dame named Marge Well done my friend. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Marge, this is absolutely beautiful. I haven't evem been back there this month, but I loved trying the form from last month. This form is beautiful. Thank you for sharing this with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What a marvelous piece of writing! This is simply excellent on every level. Compelling, universal and beautifully written. Publish this beautiful poem somewhere -- anywhere..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh dear~~~ How many times must a heart break Before the lesson’s learned Love dies … slow burn Yes, yes, and this too~ Iced-heart of never mend~ Oh cry me a river one more time would you!!! Just beautiful Marge~ |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is very aching and poignant...  I've waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is just simply awesome! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Well, poo-diddle~ Did a long drawn out thankee to everyone and Artemis ate it ! So hoping a simple THANK YOU will do. Come to the Poetry Workshop and join in the learning fun ! VICKY ..... calling VICKY~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I agree with Martie. *S* The words had me so enthralled that I had to go back again to appreciate the form. *G* But both readings gave the same conclusion... this is absolutely excellent! *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal~ Thanks sweetie~ I just LOVE this piece ! I think I could take it on foreverly~ Calling VICKY .... anyone seen VICKY ? Oh, Vicky girl ... yoohoo .... where ARE you ? Get thee to the desk and WRITE ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Nicely done! I don't know where I'm running now, I'm just running on... ~ Jackson Browne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
EagleOne~ Thank you so much~ Still waiting for Vicky to turn in her homework ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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