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Sunnyone
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0 posted 2003-03-15 01:43 AM




Love eats you alive
There's no chance to survive
As it tears into pieces a heart that was whole
It burns like a fire
Starting out as desire
Eating slowly and steadily into your soul...

In silence it goes
It's too late when it shows
If you feel your heart aching, the damage is done
Innocent at the start
Tearing your world apart
And you're left with the cold empty shell you've become...

Love eats every course
Never showing remorse
On the menu, destruction, for that which you strive
When the feast is complete
You will stand to your feet
A much wiser appetizer, knowing how it will feel
When your heart is a meal, and
Love Eats You
alive...


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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 2003-03-15 01:45 AM


seems you have a broken heart .... time heals all wounds .... you conveyed the feeling very well in this poem
Sunnyone
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2 posted 2003-03-15 01:47 AM


Thanks Jeffrey...just a little observation going on...sometimes I write for other's situations.
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3 posted 2003-03-15 01:55 AM


i see.... well you do it very well
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4 posted 2003-03-15 02:30 AM


That's one way of looking at love.  Joyce
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5 posted 2003-03-15 11:16 AM


Oh yes, you said it.
Sandra

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6 posted 2003-03-15 12:49 PM


Woah!  Just woah!

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

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7 posted 2003-03-15 01:04 PM


Sunny - very nice write - yes - it does eat you alive - sometimes is a good thing - others times bad . . .  sometimes we just never know which it will be xxoo
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8 posted 2003-03-15 01:07 PM


Yup, then you get the bill.
But I guess that's better than running a tab
and prolonging the inevitable.

Wonderful expression Sunnyone~

Sunnyone
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9 posted 2003-03-15 02:12 PM


Well, I must say that I am happy to get so many responses to this one, as it's not my usual style!!!

Thank you all so very much, and I'm glad that you enjoyed what you read!!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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10 posted 2003-03-15 03:56 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sunnyone, that could definitely be one way of looking at it, though love can also make amends and only temporarily can love feel like such an asylum! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sunnyone, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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11 posted 2003-03-15 04:05 PM


Like they say...a two edged sword...James
Sunnyone
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12 posted 2003-03-15 04:12 PM


Yes, Noah, it can certainly feel like you're hanging out in an asylum!! Thank you for the hugs, lil brother!!!

Thanks James, and I agree that it's all in how you look at it....it can be painful and beautiful at the same time!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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13 posted 2003-03-15 05:50 PM


How very true, it consumes completely. This gets my vote.
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14 posted 2003-03-15 07:22 PM


Fantastic write!!
~Hugs and a vote~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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15 posted 2003-03-15 07:47 PM


sunny - yes it does eat one, great write from your pen as always...

BC

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16 posted 2003-03-15 09:31 PM


Yes, Sunny, this isn't your style, but you still did this other perspective of love very well....

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

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17 posted 2003-03-18 12:13 PM


And at other times, it's your very sustenance. *S* This is excellent, Sunny! *S*
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18 posted 2003-03-18 12:27 PM


Golly gee, sounds as though only the brave of heart should dare falling in love! LOVE KILLS!
Glad to see in one of the replies that you wrote, that this was just an observation of other people's love lives and not your own!
The theme was a bit unsettling, but you did write it extremely well!

Warm hugs,
Linda

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19 posted 2003-03-18 01:05 PM


Hi White Rose, and thank you!  Yes, it does consume, and sometimes that pain is very pleasant!!

Hi Enchantress, and so glad you enjoyed this effort!!  Thank you!!

Hi BC, and I think poets feel the effects of love nibbling away more than the norm. Makes for inspiration!! Thanks!!

Hi garysgirl, and I think I like to dabble in foreign territory to see what happens!! Thank you, my friend!

Hi suthern, and I totally agree. Love gives and it takes...thank you so much!!

Hi Earth Angel, and no...love is for us all. We all take our chances, and each one is different than the other. Thank you for being here!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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20 posted 2003-03-19 03:27 PM


I love how this one feels.
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21 posted 2003-03-23 04:34 AM


yes love eats you alive.....canĀ“t deny that.
very well penned as always

Charisma

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22 posted 2003-04-04 07:41 AM


Alway enjoy reading you Sunnyone ~ No exception here ~ Bonnie
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23 posted 2003-04-04 08:01 AM


Sunny
You are right - it does eat you alive.  But when it is good, it is fantastic.  Great job! Enjoyed.

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