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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-03-15 12:34 PM



Spill my soul
crisp cool stream
runs deep
steep

as a mountain
High as the clouds
scream out loud:

I AM HERE
THIS IS ME
FREE

but caged
aged
young
strung out on life
strife
Spill my soul
it bleeds

Can ya patch it please?

© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
1 posted 2003-03-15 01:19 AM


Yanno? If one were able to patch his soul.....Mine would look like a crazy quilt.

Nice, Sue

"The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable"

~Bukowski~

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
2 posted 2003-03-15 04:04 AM


needle and thread in hand
bbent
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3 posted 2003-03-15 05:38 AM


Good write,can feel the anguish.I always figured the body and mind were confinment enough and the soul meant to bleed freely.Enjoyed...

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

GG
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Lost in thought
4 posted 2003-03-15 10:27 AM


well I can't, but I know Who can.
That caged and aged feeling is horrible, like you can't get anywhere and nothing is really relevant anymore. Sometimes healing is the hardest part, especially if the scabs keep opening again. Love this write ..you did it beautifully.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Connel
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5 posted 2003-03-15 10:31 AM


This is so beautiful. It means so much to me! . It reminds me of my old poem, Being Free. Except your is better . Great write!

Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part!

Ericc
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6 posted 2003-03-15 10:53 AM


Wow...powerful and beautiful (plus soooo creative!)
Eric

littlewing
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7 posted 2003-03-15 12:11 PM


ED - yours and mine both . . .

Raph - you are so sweet to me - can you start threading that needle?  xxoo

bent - flow freely - yes - I guess thats why we are here . . .  

Alyssa - I know He can too . . .  

Connel - TY for such nice comments - I seriously doubt this was better . . .
but is nice to hear

Ericc - TY - always good to hear from you - creative - hmmm  - like that

Thank you everyone xxoo


[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-15-2003 01:12 PM).]

catalinamoon
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8 posted 2003-03-15 12:34 PM


Very nice, I have the same feeling of caged..
Sandra

Amara
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9 posted 2003-03-15 12:39 PM


*offers a needle and thread* I could try! I dunno if I should handle something so delicate, though. 'Spose I break the bars on your cage instead?

Blessed Be Thee!
- Stephanie

Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown]

J. K. Mitchell
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10 posted 2003-03-15 12:45 PM


Sure!  I'll toss you some thread of love and a needle of security to make you a blanket and set yourself free.

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

BluesSerenade
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11 posted 2003-03-15 12:48 PM


So good littlewing, I liked your first stanza especially.  It was easy to get caught up in the stream and just go with the flow of your words.  We're all a work in progress, unique in our own right (write)

hugs~

littlewing
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12 posted 2003-03-15 01:11 PM


catalina - yes . . . dont we all though?

Amara - hand over that chisel please . . .

J.K - such a sweety - made me smile you did - very nice words

Blues - unique - hehehe - thank you - always like to see you reading me

xxoo

inkedgoddess
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13 posted 2003-03-16 07:47 AM



some say we have no soul. ...

i have no use for capitals and commas, , i only know how to bleed my sioul

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (03-16-2003 07:48 AM).]

littlewing
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14 posted 2003-03-16 11:31 AM


and you do that very well here Michele- thank you xxoo
JamesMichael
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15 posted 2003-03-16 02:59 PM


Perhaps if we feel to comfortable with ourself we would not consider the
desires of our soul...James

littlewing
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16 posted 2003-03-17 12:59 PM


Well put James - TY
littlewing
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17 posted 2003-03-17 01:45 PM


oops didnt mean this lol - but since I cant erase it - Ill just say thank you again lol

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-17-2003 04:43 PM).]

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