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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2003-03-14 10:36 AM



A Watchful Call

Vigilant, the eyes are there
staring back with little care.
Guarded for the unaware
in watchful silence, solitaire.

Poetic feed, attentive to
shadowed meanings, misconstrue.
Melding feelings, word fondue
merged in silence, watching you.

Each day's quest partitions, split
fenced in feelings, hedged commit.
Rhymed, these thoughts so tightly knit,
looped and furrowed in silence sit.

On the edge, time's nearing end
when dreaming leaves no more pretend.
Compromising to hasten mend
of mix in watchful silence blend.

I straighten, tall, and leave the blue
behind me now, long overdue.
Esteemed and fused and cherished view
is all I have, what's left of you.

Silence leaves a void of sense
in meaning lost of present tense,
continuance oft in suspense
and past in rest, once on the fence.

For constant staring, apologize
in watchful silence for these eyes
that lovingly have searched the rise
each meaning of, what underlies.

In secret, fragments ghost my will
exorcising influence still.
These watchful eyes seek out the thrill
of constant silence, mine, to fill.

In moments lull, they feel the draw
no words in whisper, just the fall
of thoughts that roam to christen all
the views that sound a watchful call.

M

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-14-2003 10:36 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-14 11:16 AM



Maureen, I had to smile
at "fondue"...

a good write...thanks, dear!

Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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2 posted 2003-03-14 11:28 AM




Maureen,

You know I read this and decided to tell you I liked the last three stanzas the best. I reread and decided, no it is the last four stanzas. On the third read my conclusion was this entire poem is excellent. It needs to be read more than once. So much here. I really like this a great deal. It is very good.

Hugs, Pat

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3 posted 2003-03-14 11:31 AM


I sit in the dark quiet and read this...it touches me.
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4 posted 2003-03-14 11:37 AM


Maureen, there is a lot to be heard
in the silence...and a lot to be found
in your words of your poetry.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2003-03-14 12:07 PM


I kind of like the fondue myself ( although I haven't had any in maybe 20 years)I was  eating lunch when I wrote that part  
Thanks Karilea
M

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-14-2003 03:23 PM).]

ngoliant
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6 posted 2003-03-14 03:03 PM


I liked the concept of word fondue, as well - words never fall into a vaccuum.
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