Thank you for taking your time to read and for your reply which captures exactly my meaning.
This poem is meant to be applied to any or all kinds of relationships. I was indeed blessed in early teens, for God gave to me my best friend who is this attuned to me. She is extraordinary and had NEVER not been there for me. What's more, nothing I say alters her love for me. The topping on that cake is that she and I also are so compatible in sense of humor sometimes in only takes the tone of our voices to burst out laughing.
I so appreciate you responding today.
It means a great deal.
Thank you, Hugs, Pat
Yes, amen and thank you
May you have a glorious day. We have rain, wind and fog...but it is still wonderful....tho I have to go out in it shortly...It is a great day whenever you respond to my poetry.
Thank for so much for your comments.
Yes, regarding those connections. Rare, I think...but there, in time, if I practice what I preach....which I don't always do for reasons not related to this poem...
I am glad you enjoyed and thanks for the very nice....
Thank you most of all for the couple of thoughts. You are absolutely right.
To date, when I write, I do not start out with a conscious thought of: [this is what I want to say/accomplish with this poem] But, I DID REMEMBER what you suggested the last time, after the fact.
There is a definite separation from above the [AND] and the bottom of the poem.
I struggled and struggled trying to tie them together and opted for the [and] knowing it still didn't work.
Ultimately, after I had all the lines, I didn't want to give up any of them.
And did not know how to restructure, or structure them for a smooth transition.
It is almost like two poems, or perhaps should have been, adding to each instead of trying to pull them together.
So, everything you said does make sense and you spotted my problem.
Clearly I am at a point in writing that it is time to learn to 'clean it up, first'. This is not an excuse, but a reason: I was NOT totally convinced that I could write even half-way decent poetry. And that is why I kept and keep posting to see if perhaps some can relate. Well, I see now I can.
I thank you so much for your patience of seemingly repeating yourself and showing me how this could be better.
But, that is exactly what I need.
I am so grateful you take the time.
Probably won't try to fix this, as I am running hours late already re: what I am supposed to be doing today vs. what I am doing....
Any other thoughts from you would be kindly appreciated. Please don't think I'm not hearing you. I am. I need to take the time to think first. Or, what I have not done is just hold a poem for a few days and go back to it. Especially when I myself, know there is something wrong.
I will be going out soon, (ugh) so may not see your reply, if any...
Hugs to you for your help and thank you so much. Pat
sorry for the long answer....and time it took to get back here...
..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..