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Tristan
Junior Member
since 2003-03-12
Posts 29


0 posted 2003-03-13 09:24 PM



I've dreamt about you my whole life.

I know that you are perfect,
and you're favorite color is green.

I know every detail of your life,
and about that time you hit your dad.

I know your good times and bad ones,
and have seen all the times you've cried.

But you are just someone I've dreamt of.

The real you isn't perfect,
and makes mistakes all the time.

I don't know every detail of your life,
and there are some things you don't tell me.

I don't know all the good times and bad ones,
and i haven't seen all the times you've cried.

I could never have dreamt up the person that you are.

But it's all o.k. because, I know you love me too.


© Copyright 2003 Tristan - All Rights Reserved
Amara
Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158
East of the moon, west of the sun.
1 posted 2003-03-13 09:30 PM


Hmmmm...sorry, I can't help you! *blank mind* My creativity's worn out for the day. 'Tis a nice poem, though, and true! No one's perfect...but hey, if ya love each other, perfection doesn't seem as important. ^^ Not that I speak from experiance, myself. *sighs*

Blessed Be Thee!
- Stephanie

Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown]

Dragon Mistress
Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289
Washington, USA.
2 posted 2003-03-14 01:25 AM


Quite beautiful.  I really dont know what you should call it.  Sometime's works this nice don't deserve to be labled...but that's just my opinion.
Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2003-03-14 04:56 AM


I don't have an idea for a title but I like it anyway.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Connel
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Senior Member
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736
Florida, USA
4 posted 2003-03-14 09:13 AM


hmmmmm... Name? errr..... *thinking*.. The One Love. lol.. Thats the only thing I could think of. .,. But I did enjoy this poem. Good work !

Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part!

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