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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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0 posted 2003-03-13 11:32 AM

Take my hand
Not because I held it out
But that you reached for it
In willing desire
To touch and ground
This spark of us.

In finger bind
Palm faced pleasures
Of slow

Yes…
I am old.

Driven less by groin
Than by well worn mind
It is tenderness my heart would find
In embrace or lover twine
Knotted
Not in gut wrenched clime
But in bows
Over hands
With loops of you
Threaded through days and nights
Of gentler times

Reach for me
And with quiet eyes
See far inside the yesterdays
That color mine
but touch me please

of your own design

BlueEyes
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since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

1 posted 2003-03-13 11:39 AM

this was amazing.....

BlueEyes

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

2 posted 2003-03-13 11:41 AM

with quiet eyes''
WOW loving that, and this poem....

hugssss

Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

3 posted 2003-03-13 11:42 AM

Blueeyes...Glad you enjoyed...as for it being amazing..I think you far too kind in your words..but than you for the very nice words.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (03-13-2003 11:44 AM).]

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-03-13 11:44 AM

Greeneyes... I am glad you enjoyed...
and thank you sincerely for the kind words...one of these days..I could only hope to write as well as you and others here..

Seymour Tabin
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Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2003-03-13 11:44 AM

Cpat,
Good write, enjoyed.

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-03-13 11:45 AM

thank you Sy... appreciate you dropping in and taking time to read.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-03-13 11:51 AM

"In embrace or lover twine
Knotted
Not in gut wrenched clime
But in bows
Over hands
With loops of you
Threaded through days and nights
Of gentler times"
--------------------------------------------
Oh my...oh my yes...
'with quiet eyes'..
What a beautiful way you have of saying
what any woman would love to hear Captain.
Much enjoyed this keeper.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2003-03-13 11:52 AM

Driven less by groin
Than by well worn mind
It is tenderness my heart would find
In embrace or lover twine
Knotted
Not in gut wrenched clime
But in bows
Over hands
With loops of you
Threaded through days and nights
Of gentler times

Reach for me
And with quiet eyes
See far inside the yesterdays
That color mine
but touch me please

of your own design
===========================

Will you look at this...I come in here to take a poetry break from my "chores" and you've reduced me to moth putty. *S*
Hows a girl supposed to get any work done with weak knees, sighing.

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (03-13-2003 11:53 AM).]

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

9 posted 2003-03-13 11:55 AM

Nancy... thank you sweet one..for the nice words.. you are too kind.

JM.. (chuckling) it would seem it takes little in the way of talent to paint ideas in your mothy mind... thank you sincerely for the overly kind words...

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-03-13 12:18 PM

Ron...this:

Not because I held it out
But that you reached for it

and:

Driven less by groin
Than by well worn mind

also:

But in bows
Over hands
With loops of you

Wonderful poetry, my friend!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2003-03-13 12:19 PM

...Take my hand
Not because I held it out
But that you reached for it
In willing desire
To touch and ground
This spark of us. ...

Yes.

Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

12 posted 2003-03-13 12:27 PM

martie... thank you for the nice words..they are appreciated

sunshine... glad you found something you enjoyed in this.

regards2you
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Posts 3940
California

13 posted 2003-03-13 12:31 PM

Ah, to be loved, so!

With age comes wisdom. A well worn mind more appealing than a groin's ache as is the tenderness sought after that first spark. This is so special.

May gentle eyes find you and soothe you and cause you considerable happiness and joy you've not known.

Your poetry does leave one weak-kneed. Thank you for touching so deeply, always causing me to feel, often to the point of tears. They are good ones though! What gifts you give to us.

Again, thank you,

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

14 posted 2003-03-13 12:35 PM

Pat.. your praise, though in my mind overly kind and undeserved by this poet, is geatly appreciated... I think as writers we would all like to know or think our words have in some way pleased or moved others... I can think of no higher form of praise than someone telling you they are.

thank you

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

15 posted 2003-03-13 12:41 PM

Ve are too shoon olt und too late shmart. Cruel fate this life which starts the lasses out wanting love and later lust and the lads wanting lust and later love.

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

16 posted 2003-03-13 12:43 PM

chuckling.... RS... nothing I can add to your wisdom... thanks for the read..and the response

Krawdad
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Posts 2597

17 posted 2003-03-13 01:13 PM

Excellent, Sir.
Your age is wearing well.

"Reach for me
And with quiet eyes
See far inside the yesterdays
That color mine
but touch me please

of your own design"

And well I understand this plea . . .

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

18 posted 2003-03-13 01:19 PM

thank you sir.. appreciate the read and the nice words.

jellybeans
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Posts 2298

19 posted 2003-03-13 02:37 PM

excellent.....simply equisite....every word carefully orchestrated ......sigh
have never read this feeling written quite so perfectly.....*shakes her head and sighs*
am not surprised to read it from your pen

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

20 posted 2003-03-13 02:51 PM

JB... nice to see you...hope all is well in your world... you praise to highly.... but indeed it is appreciated..thank you.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

21 posted 2003-03-13 05:48 PM

(smiles) Oh Ron, your words are bound to make your love skip heartbears, sweet friend, this is lovely and God truly has a plan for you both together living happily forever! (big hugggsssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

22 posted 2003-03-13 06:14 PM

Capt. Ron, your talents in writing poetry never cease to amaze me. You make any subject you write about so real. It was as if you were speaking these words to your Love.

Hugs,
Ethel

Duncan
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Posts 5455

23 posted 2003-03-13 06:38 PM

'Knotted
Not in gut wrenched clime
But in bows
Over hands
With loops of you
Threaded through days and nights
Of gentler times'

Love that...'loops of you'.

The place of content that I think this was written from has always alluded me. And so it read almost lyrically, like a melody I can't quite place...

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

24 posted 2003-03-13 06:58 PM

"but touch me please

of your own design"

Enjoyed your words..I like very much what these lines say..

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

KristieSue

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since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

25 posted 2003-03-13 07:20 PM

...and people wonder why I like older guys...*sigh* LOL

you're amazing Ron, simply,utterly,profoundly AMAZING

KS

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

26 posted 2003-03-13 07:56 PM

liked it

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

27 posted 2003-03-13 09:56 PM

Wow captain, incredibly beautiful words and sentiments, hope you find it

Paul Wilson

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Posts 4711
United States

28 posted 2003-03-13 10:04 PM

Capt Hair...Ron you know these beautiful words have been growing in your heart for many many years, they took time to grow until today when you gave birth too them.
Wonderful words of a timeless love...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

29 posted 2003-03-13 10:40 PM

What a gentle hand you have.

Cor

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

30 posted 2003-03-13 10:57 PM

Take my hand
Not because I held it out
But that you reached for it

Ron - this is an awesome write! So glad I read this before I turned off the puter for the night. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

hoot_owl_rn
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Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

31 posted 2003-03-14 07:26 AM

Oh man, you old??? Your words seep of the youth you hold within. Lovely write

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

32 posted 2003-03-14 10:28 AM

Ron,

I am not even sure what to say as I always seem to be at a loss for words after reading you. I long to hear words such as yours. You are truly gifted at making the women swoon!

Susan

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

33 posted 2003-03-14 11:51 AM

Oh, my. *soft smile*

What lady wouldn't love to hear such words? What one who breathes wouldn't melt??

Amazing and wonderful write! *S*

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

34 posted 2003-03-15 07:57 AM

so so glad i didn't miss this tender write.

your poem has a home in my library ron.
xxxxxxxxx love gemma xxxxxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

gemjop
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Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

35 posted 2003-03-15 07:59 AM

oh dear, in all my excitement, i forgot to add it! he he.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Connel

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since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

36 posted 2003-03-15 11:02 AM

This was great!

Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part!

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

37 posted 2003-03-15 12:19 PM

Driven less by groin
Than by well worn mind

These lines alone make this poem worth reading...I was mouthing "OOOOhhhhh", an impish grin on my face and thinking, "you don't say..."

oh well, don't judge me..i'm still a hotblooded young pup...

[This message has been edited by kaile (03-15-2003 12:20 PM).]

passing shadows
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displaced

38 posted 2003-03-15 12:22 PM

This is great!

littlewing
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39 posted 2003-03-15 01:20 PM

Ron:

Take my hand
Not because I held it out
But that you reached for it

this is just amazing - excellent write here
xxoo

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