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Ericc
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0 posted 2003-03-12 04:53 PM



I whisper something to the night.
I whisper -
A wish...lost against a thousand
falling stars.

I whisper -
A prayer...voiced unknown as if an echo
from the past - hollow of any true
meaning anymore - as it fades
within the night.

I whisper -
A plea...to only feel a little less
alone...a plea for arms that know
and hold me fast against this
passing wave of sadness.

I whisper something to the night.

And the night...the night...whispers
something
back -

The night whispers -
A wish...for me to search far and long
among the stars.

The night whispers -
A prayer...voiced in stillness,
unfolding in the subtle layers
of an echo -
deeper...deeper and falling
deeper still.

The night whispers -
A plea...to feel her evening breeze
as it brushes past to dry my
every tear -
A plea to feel the night itself
cloaked in hidden arms of
darkness...arms that only yearn
to feel alive against my skin
as it heats to loves caress.

I whisper something to the night.

And listen to the answer



© Copyright 2003 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-03-12 05:01 PM



...Beautiful!!...

Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-03-12 05:06 PM


Gads...
this is the second
tear jerker I've read...

and that's meant as a compliment, Ericc....

you guys can't help but pull out
all the stops...[This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-12-2003 05:07 PM).]

Amara
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3 posted 2003-03-12 06:42 PM


Superb! Wow! *speechless* Amazing! Beautiful! *random adjectives pop out of mouth*

GREAT write, really! One of my favourites of the past few days.

Every heart has hidden treasures...a secret wish, a silent dream, and a cherished love. [Unknown]

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-03-12 08:00 PM


Ericc - good for you - keep listening - I felt this one xxoo
1slick_lady
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5 posted 2003-03-13 06:49 AM


beautiful...my fav part...

"I whisper something to the night.

And the night...the night...whispers
something
back - "

cinnamongirl
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6 posted 2003-03-13 04:06 PM


Stunningly beautiful, passionate, full of longing and love and magic.  This evokes some incredibly strong emotions.  

Breathtaking... amazing... beautiful.

Thank you...

Love,
Moca

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7 posted 2003-03-13 05:26 PM




(smiles) Oh Eric, this is lovely, sweet friend, this felt to me like a conversation between two people, a private conversation from where a romeo speaks to a lady love from her balustrade, this is enchanting, my the stars always beacon for you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Etain
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8 posted 2003-03-13 07:48 PM


Beautiful as all yours Ericc.
The night is so inspiring,
such stillness speaks aloud
and clear,
Hugs,
Etain.

vandana
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9 posted 2003-03-13 07:56 PM


good write
Bill Charles
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10 posted 2003-03-13 11:08 PM


Ericc - listen to the night, as it will whisper back to you. Awesome writing...

BC

silvergriffinfire
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11 posted 2003-03-13 11:16 PM


Wow. I loved it. beautiful (don't know what else to say) wow
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12 posted 2003-03-14 01:09 AM


Eric, this is so beautiful, even if it is sad. I love the way you write.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

Dragon Mistress
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13 posted 2003-03-14 01:21 AM


Wow.  I'm not sure why, but this brought a tear to my eye.  It's beautiful, quite beautiful.
Tanya

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