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A Small Space (Formerly A Calling)
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A Small Space (Formerly A Calling) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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A Small Space An inexplicable longing drives my thoughts to a certain beach and rundown pier, to peek between pilings and the drowning beneath. When my Father died, I saw him there, as enigmatic as he was in life - dark clouds on a blue morning. And when I visited church that day, (where I first received communion back when I was faithful), the priest hurried off in swirls of black, ran when I begged him to unlock doors. When this trap tightens, holds me, a helpless hostage to dry riverbeds and a smoky summer existence, I escape, to hear an ocean inside. [This message has been edited by Corinne (03-13-2003 05:32 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, A good thoughtful write, enjoyed the read. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks Sey! Cor |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
When this trap gets smaller, the corral that holds me helplessly inland, where riverbeds run dry in summer and summer means a smoky existence, smoke in the valleys and in my throat, Cor... you write with a heart heavy it seems to be again in places remembered...and places where the breeze off mornings tide..wipes the smoke and perhaps the tears away... just know, that if you never get there...the ocean inside is always there and a place no one can take from you... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
iwihwt.... because I've known that inexplicable that you have captured so well... |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Oh my. This is truly one of your best poems yet! I must read more of your poetry!  Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Incredibly beautiful write |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Wow, what a coincidence, I am going down to New Mexico during Spring Break to the sacred church where they say perpetual light came from beneath the ground to the heavens and the soil is sacred! (big hugggssssss) I know perhaps I can translate His calling, but the whole interpretation can never be preconceived, it has to be experienced, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This reminded me of the theme song from "Born Free" Stay free, where no walls divide you~ Your writing is so fine tuned Corinne~ What can I say!! |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
there...that's how I feel...you said it brilliantly. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
It's a beauty Corinne Ed |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, sweet poets. Cor |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
I very much enjoy the sounds of this, the rhythm. Nicely done, Corinne. Bob |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Bob. Good to see you back again! Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I love this write sweet poet, it speaks to me of a past existance that I can relate to. Your a wonderful writer of life always.  Park |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Park - always so happy to see you - and your work - ahem, where is your work? Hmmm? It's time to celebrate St. Patty's (I'll dig mine out if you dig out yours). Lass |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is marvelous, absolutely... and the imagery? excellent as always Corinne. It's always a pleasure to read you. Maree |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
my work.... its its its in the works... Its not quite warm up here yet but soon, my first venture as captin of a brand new adventure... you can bet i'll have my writing books handy... First weekend in May boats go in the water around here. .... come sail with me to county cork. oh and I won't forget you promised to show me yours.  Park |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Corinne - this is just amazing . . . you penned it nicely xxoo |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
hahaha, Park! You silly goose! Yes, water tales, sounds good! Thanks, little wing! Cor |
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