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Aenimal
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0 posted 2003-03-11 08:52 PM


In between
powerline buzz
and airwave static
through
honk of horn
machine whir
and inane chatter

Your voice
rang clear,
the first time
in aeons
sweetly laced
upon enchanted
strings of
Vivaldi's Spring


Can the dead rise again?

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-11-2003 08:53 PM).]

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Connel
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1 posted 2003-03-11 08:54 PM


you have an unuasual style of poetry. . But in a good way.

Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part!

icequeen
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2 posted 2003-03-11 08:57 PM


I love how you can pack so much into so few words. Your writing has such impact...
as if it jumps off the screen onto my shoulder

Awesome work.

the only man worth your tears will never make you cry

wranx
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3 posted 2003-03-11 09:10 PM


An evokative one.

Ed

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4 posted 2003-03-11 09:19 PM


Now you've made me want to grab Vivaldi.
Etain
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5 posted 2003-03-11 09:26 PM


I liked it!
Mysterious, yet so filled with music.
Love,
Etain.

Magnus
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6 posted 2003-03-11 09:27 PM


Raph,  do love your metaphors!  Excellent!
Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-03-11 09:55 PM


Thanks Connel unusual style? I didn't think I had any style really

thanks icequeen appreciate the kind words

Thanks Ed i try

Kacy go I just spent two hours with my classical music, makes one restore faith in the beauty mankind can create..at least until you watch the news

Thank you Etain kind words

Thanks Barry always a pleasure to see you

Midnitesun
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8 posted 2003-03-11 11:24 PM


So leave the news for another day, go back to the music and have a great night.
That's what I intend to do...Keith Jarret awaits my ears at this very moment.

littlewing
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9 posted 2003-03-12 01:16 AM


Raph - ahhhh Vivaldi - yess - wishing you more moments of such utter tranquility - that voice?  listen to it . . . this IS music . . .  
as always xxoo

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Aenimal
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10 posted 2003-03-12 03:33 PM


Kacy I avoid it when possible sometimes it fins you anyway

Thanks Sue love my Vivaldi..those strings

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11 posted 2003-03-12 08:32 PM



Ceinwyn
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12 posted 2003-03-12 08:41 PM


Now that's what I'm talking about...*goes back to her corner now* ciao...honestly what are you feeding your muse!?

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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13 posted 2003-03-12 09:12 PM


enjoyed
Aenimal
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14 posted 2003-03-12 09:13 PM


Thanks gemma  

Kris she feeds me

thanks vandana!

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15 posted 2003-03-13 12:37 PM


Your voice
rang clear,
the first time
in aeons
sweetly laced
upon enchanted
strings of
Vivaldi's Spring''
enchanting....
Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

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16 posted 2003-03-13 01:33 AM


Woo-hoo! Sounds like a couple of 'em just might....

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17 posted 2003-03-13 02:04 AM


...makes me long to grab my violin and play some Vivaldi ;-) beautiful, sweet.....

I love your writing Aenimal...

Aenimal
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18 posted 2003-03-13 11:33 AM


Thanks Greeneyes

Hope so Ratleader

Play Kristen play!

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