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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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“R” With a backward strut, she wrecks high-noon traffic on Main Street breaks up a couple holding hands slams into a man eating a dog moon-walks against the red sees only green from her view – cars block intersections in smoky ruin horns wail, taxi drivers yell she doesn’t see or hear them puts on her headphones heel-toes onto the curb tangles with a lady and two leashed poodles and listens to I Am The Walrus, this, she understands. © 2003 Core "I Am the Walrus" Written by Lennon/McCartney Lead vocal by John Lennon From the album Magical Mystery Tour [This message has been edited by Corinne (03-11-2003 11:09 PM).] |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
very cool imagery here... I get very vivid pictures of the entire scene. (And I love that song too!) I also like how "man eating a dog" gives the reader almost a double-take reaction. Nice touch  the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Corinne, I just love this, sweet friend, I am fond of The Beatles greatly and really, anyone could be the walrus and someday you just have to fit those tusks in! (big hugggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Considering I am the Walrus is one of my absolute favourite Beatles songs and that you are one of my favourite writers I dub this a match made in heaven. grin |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well! Coo Coo Cachoo! Yellow matter mustard? Awesome Cor! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Way cool write Cor! Much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very nice. I got a good image from your description.. Good work!  Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Grinning here, as the wranxster stole my reply! Loved this write to the Core. |
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