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Greeneyes
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0 posted 2003-03-11 05:33 PM


{Would you know my heart}

If it whispered your name       softly

     the fantasy of pressing

lips—gentle touch        fingertip traces

eyes making love

   {Would you remember the feeling of velvet}

silk skin, lingering – longing –aching~~

    I am here
come touch my heart &

remember    

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

© Copyright 2003 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-03-11 05:38 PM


Greeneyes
Could anyone recieve a nicer invitation.


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2 posted 2003-03-11 05:50 PM


your words invite indeed...and I am sure no one could forget...

very softly sensual.. nicely done.

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3 posted 2003-03-11 06:01 PM




(smiles) Oh Lauren, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, this made me smile as so many of your gorgeous words do, with your words of velvet they would never cease to make your love remember! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2003-03-11 06:05 PM


Silky soft in sensuality Lauren...
Love this.
~Smiles & Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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5 posted 2003-03-11 07:33 PM


ENJOYED
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6 posted 2003-03-11 07:54 PM


A gentle and enjoyable write. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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7 posted 2003-03-11 08:10 PM



Lauren,

This is so lovely. Soft, tender, and subtly sensual.


ENjoyed greatly,

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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8 posted 2003-03-11 08:25 PM


Lauren, this is so beautiful.;loveya:
Hugs,
Ethel

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9 posted 2003-03-11 08:27 PM


Two words, lucky bastard..
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10 posted 2003-03-11 09:58 PM


Ahh, nice nice. Loved it!

Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part!

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11 posted 2003-03-11 11:15 PM


Greeneyes - your words are said with enchantment, warm must be your heart. You are a master of romance...

BC

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12 posted 2003-03-12 12:36 PM


Such a soft touch, as always.

Very pretty Lauren~

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13 posted 2003-03-12 12:38 PM


the wa you use the formatting to control the pace and feel was intersting and new to me. i will have to re-read a couple more times to get the true feel.

nice.

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14 posted 2003-03-12 02:07 AM


Yes, I believe I'd know that feeling very well, sweet friend, and have known it at least a few times.  This is not only very sensual, but also thought-provoking.  Because of your knowing in how to place a pen so perfectly, as you always do, I would truly love to see this in the book, Lauren.  Love and hugs to you

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

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15 posted 2003-03-12 02:09 AM


beautiful
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16 posted 2003-03-12 04:23 PM


Softly.
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They wouldn't dare forget...
beautiful, Lauren...simply beautiful...

Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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18 posted 2003-03-13 03:21 PM


Well...I'm gonna have a reread, just because.

Lovely, this is


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19 posted 2003-03-13 04:39 PM


Hey all....

I so appreciate all the beautiful comments, it means so much that you take your time  to read....Peace to all.....Love too

Muwwwaaahhhsss and HUGSSSSSSSSS

Lauren~

Here I am
Running after dreams ~
I made it through another lonely night
Thinking of you
I know I should be strong
I just can’t say ~goodbye~(LR)

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20 posted 2003-03-13 07:52 PM


I loved it, it was beautiful. Keep up the good work.
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21 posted 2003-03-13 10:44 PM


Greeneyes~ Tender thoughts written so softly.
Enjoyed very much...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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22 posted 2003-03-14 09:16 AM


had to come back and visit this... it is indeed soft... and such an appealing write.

you took very few words to convey so much more than some take volumes to try and say..leaving the reader indeed with an understanding as well as enough room to draw their own life into the piece...

I did.. and do enjoy this type of write...


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23 posted 2003-03-14 10:14 AM


Lady L~ you have no idea of how this speaks to me on this day....love it hon....luv you!

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

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24 posted 2003-03-15 12:39 PM


Oh, this calls for a big SIGH...
Sandra

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25 posted 2003-03-15 01:16 PM


Lauren - this is beautiful - I seriously doubt anyone will forget . . .  xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-15-2003 01:17 PM).]

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26 posted 2003-03-15 02:38 PM


An invitation worth taking, I do believe.

Silk, skin, eyes making love, what an enjoyable prelude to an even more wonderful time to come.

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27 posted 2003-03-15 05:08 PM


This is just SO sweet and soft, I could have sworn I smelled "downy" while reading!

Such a gentle way with words, and yes, I envy that.

Hugs, Lauren.

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28 posted 2003-03-15 05:19 PM


"eyes making love"

lovely words always

~A~

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