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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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There are no tears no not for this My tortured soul infinitesimal abyss it cried, it screamed it prayed to God, "Plant wings upon my back and make me fly" Yet I was not heard not then , not near I slept a sleep of repeated fear for you I slept I hardly dreamt yet welcomed you when you crept you slithered you sneered into my mind you flew like a vulture surveying his prey for years no there are no tears not for this or you The constant rising taste of bile reminds me daily that tears cannot replace what you have stolen from me that child so long ago who believed in you I was the only one in the end "Oh, Lord, cannot you hear my silent plea? Plant wings upon my back and set me free. I'm dying inside my soul - it bleeds Am I too young to feel that I need to hear you whisper to me in the silent dead dark deep black of night?" The day a single tear shall fall from this face Is the day in which I have signed my soul to the Devil himself No, there are no tears not for this This child that was once able to cry Is as dry as the desert sand wandering aimlessly wide - eyed Awaiting a reply . . . [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-11-2003 02:28 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Sue, this is painful and sad...but I see strength here too...we all get wings one day...good write |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Wow...What more can I say than that. It's sad, but powerful. Very good, I enjoyed this very much! Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
so sad when a child has to live through this,and sadder when it lives, still unresolved, without peace made, through the later years. good words, run deep |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
So very intense. Eric |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
this one just aches through to core |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
I have read few pieces of writing that are as fine as this one. It has power, emotion, intensity, longing, ache, anger, and strength... and you have combined all of it in a most perfect way. You are an amazing poet, friend. the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
This one is very nice, but Im still creing from it  . But its still good..  Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
No, never for this. The writing is stellar. Ed |
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Etain Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 92The moon... |
The spirit talked! Beautiful, intense and sublime. Love, Etain. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, this is absolutely beautiful. An amazing write. Though sad, there is so much determination and strength felt. Heart Hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (03-11-2003 09:12 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Gulp. Superbly written heart and soul pain. Fly, littlewinged one. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
shadows TY - thats why I am a littlewing - havent earned my big ones yet Tanya - TY - sad but needed Michele - vow to myself to watch my own like a hawk TY Ericc TY for reading Raph - I wanted this pulled . . . Ice - WOW - what a compliment - thank you -needed that I did - makes me feel better about posting this Connel - happy tears I hope sorry . . . Ed - you got it TY Etain & Enchantress - TY so very much for reading Ethel - TY strength yes - forgiveness no Midnite - geez - how beautiful - im flappin my wings I am . . . Thanks guys means a lot to me xxoo |
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meek scorpion New Member
since 2003-03-12
Posts 9margaritaville |
you are very talented in your expression - it brings me to places i wouldnt dare to revisit otherwise.thank-you for this candid expression. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
quote: I just loved this line, and the way you repeated it, it was subtle but came at the perfect point in time for the poem, I really enjoyed reading this, kind of dark and defiant, thanks for sharing this with us  Andrew |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm loving watching you fly across the blue pages littlewing. Your writing is as strong and graceful as your heart--you write with the honesty and courage of true poetry. This is very touching. and funny, I know that place without tears and it always seems to me that that place is the one that hurts the most...  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sue, Very intense write. Kept my attention line after painful line. I am left with my own thoughts of the differences of being bent vs. broken. A soul searching write! Well done!! Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
scorpin - TY - you of all people know what this means to me Andrew TY - yes my favorite line too K - I'm flyin - I didnt know I was flyin lol - its too cold out to fly . . . but seriously - your words mean so much to me and now I have two homes - and yes that place with no tears is the hardest place to be - I'm with you on that - I am just glad a little animal friend of ours brought me here - and am grateful to be accepted - as for the heart - I dont think any of us could write without that - that has gotten me into these messes of mine - needed that much TY Pat - thank you so much - yes sometimes when we think we are broken we are only a little tweaked in places Thank you guys - Poet thanks for not pulling this like I asked xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-12-2003 07:33 AM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
such emotion..I feel it right here..honestly...it does ache and it ohh well n/m..enjoyed tho.. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I find great strength and hope in your ability to plea so openly, yet with such deep felt angst. Strongly written. Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
C and Ken - thank you so very much - makes me feel good I didnt freak anyone out lol - xxoo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I wish I could cry, too. Maybe not for what they've all done to me, but for what I've done to myself, and just life's going on. They may not be worthy of even the tears, but you are. Oh and watch ahead of you not just up, 'cause sometimes God parts the water instead of letting you fly. I personally have learned to swim.. still help in His hands!  I love this poem. Very deep.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
C - no n/m speak your mind - thats what where here for - thank you - am glad you get something out of it painful as it is Ken - thank you - makes me feel safe - your words James - always reading . . . TY Alyssa - WOW - thank you for the insight - so true - and thank you for your words - they mean much to me Thank you guys xxoo |
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