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Butterfly Talk (Ekphrastic)
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Butterfly Talk (Ekphrastic) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Butterfly Talk We fill the room with yellow butterflies of talk, a happy moil of little purposes, each unique, a magic fleck of sunlight, brighter than the room; so often caught but still uncatchable. Sometimes one may pause on a lampshade, on a curtain, one of us; some scatter off through doors, windows, others fade while present, blending brightly just before they disappear. We're talking new ones as we go; my first is tiny, blue. I watch it, hesitant but flying, then a stop, a sip, and on with a tinge of yellow; soon as sunny as the rest. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (03-11-2003 01:25 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OH wow!!  I love this!...and the presentation! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...This is really lovely, could visualize, not butterflies, but little thoughts, pretty and sometimes unsure or sometimes bold and bright. The way you mapped the page was perfect! Hugs to you, my friend. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
butterfly talk ....while performing their lovely dance! So nice! Margherita |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ed, So very creative! Interesting, to say the least. Enjoyed these little flights of thought. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Bravo, this is breath taking....nice work Sir... Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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noah j Member
since 2003-03-05
Posts 82on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair |
love the imagery. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
This is amazing. At first I was confused with the presentation (you know how rock musicians are) however, when I read it again, I realized just exactly how brilliant it was... just like those little butterflies that seem to scatter with no rhyme or reason, so has your poem been shown to us... This should be in the book... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
There -- I had forgotten to note that this is an ekphrastic poem -- shaped to match its meaning..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Form fitted flutterby. Cool! |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
I missed when posted, but glad that wranx commented.... I love the format!!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very nice! very nice. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Rat - nice form there - love the theme (hint hint - wings lol) nice writing - xxoo |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is so pretty, I see the flitting thoughts like butterflies. I love this! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HelloNewFriend~ Oh ... Oh ... the word-artist in me LIKES this one bunches~ Great big howdy-do and welcome to you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ratleader - nice write, different in presentation, but it works well... BC |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ed...I absolutely love the content and wording of the poem and although I knew exactly where you were going with the formatting, I found it difficult to read and thought that the persentation distracted from the beautiful words that lay within. Just a bit too broken for my tastes |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
daydream butterfly free fall summer sky set them free, enjoy their time, just passing thru, though so sublime |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, this is really pretty I really like this form poetry, too. Very interesting....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Glad you liked it -- these things are definitely fun to write, and they also give you some tools to help move the poem. I've used ekphrasis on serious topics too. I shaped The Towers Down, over in Reflections, in a way that would call the falling towers to mind. Hi Hoot-- thanks for the feedback. I wrote it straight, then tried several alternative shapes and layouts before I settled on this one....but then I already knew what it said, so might not have had the clearest eyes when making the decision.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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