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If Words But Could, They Would ... { Sky Dance }

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 03-09-2003 10:41 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

        

If Words But Could, They Would ...

            {Sky Dance}


I should lay down my pen ...
rather than do this view an inked injustice.

Words both pale and fail when compared
to dawn's dance upon day.

Each morn the cycle repeats its resplendence,
still no two scenes of renew are ever the same.
And here I sit in my room with a view ...
searching for words to convey what the
sky shares in it's dawning display.

As if a mere poet could pen such grace, as if couplets of
cadence could capture the colors of the cloud's constance.
How would I resonate the reds ... orchestrate the orange?
To pen in pinks and purples couldn't come close to painting
upon creation's canvas. To write of violet hued views or
horizons of blue, could never do such brilliance true.

So I question the whys ...
Just who am I, to even try?
How would I ever explain the sky?
No dictionary could bind these colors to paper ...
How would hand written lines define the sun in shine?
Such splendor shouldn't be restricted by rhyme.
No pen stroke could portray the beauty that begins and ends
each day. What would the words say of the sky in sway?

How could verses of verbiaged verbalize ever speak sure of
salmon streaked skies born to morn's salient sunrise?
Ink immersed images cant compete with crimson cast clouds,
with skylines surrendering to sunshine's saturation.

As if alliterated adjectives could ever be adequate ...
I have no answers ... I've only unadulterated awe.


What would justify a poet's pretense to try? Perhaps a need
for others to see the sky through poetry's perceptive eye?
Or is it that the clouds call out, that the sun summons ...
the sky sequesters as the scene serene stirs our muse?
Is it inspiration's ensue that our pens cannot refuse?

Why cant I be content to just witness the wonder?
Couldn't it be enough to frame the moment on film?
Shouldn't I be satisfied with making a memory in my mind?
From where comes this cadenced coerce to capture the scene
in metered verse or rhyme scheme?

If I could, I would poetically compose this morning's blue hued birth,
if I believed for even a moment I might find words to write its worth.
As the sun stains the sky in scarlet baptize, my humbled eyes realize
somethings cant be contained nor explained in poetic reprise.

Dusk and dawn's daily sky dance ... holds my heart and pen in trance,
it takes but a glance to know the exquisite needs no eloquent enhance.


Janet Marie



        


"I think that I shall never see  
A poem lovely as a tree."  
              
             ~*~
"Poems are made by fools like me,  
But only God can make a tree."  

From "Trees"
By: Joyce Kilmer

  
**sunrise photos taken from my front porch/St. Louis, MO


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (03-09-2003 11:37 PM).]

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Dear Poet Janet Marie...It is not the sunset the poet would rhapsodize...but the feeling that it gives them as with this poetic grace of word....and sometimes I really think, the sunset dims when compared with the beauty of some poet's ink!  

[This message has been edited by Martie (03-09-2003 10:50 PM).]

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2 posted 03-09-2003 10:48 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

WOWIEEEEEE
Breathtaking photos and beautiful words...
Thank you so much for sharing the beauty of this scene and the beauty that is you.

Later awesome gator
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Beautiful words. beautiful imagery. Beautiful poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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(smiles) Yep, no one can captivate the entirety of the beauty illuminated before us all, as nature is an illustrious thing far beyond comprehension, yet just knowing it exists is a phenominal thing and interpreting at least part of how it feels to us! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, yay, I absolutely love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton











"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 03-09-2003 11:04 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Oh my Janet Marie!  I'm sitting here in stunned silence..
absorbing your beautiful words..enjoying the splendid pictures,
and totally at a loss for words..
at least any that would do this piece the justice it so deserves.
YOU girlie...are simply amazing and never cease to blow me away when you post!
Thank you for this keeper...
Thank you for your kind replies to my work.
Bless you for being you!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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6 posted 03-09-2003 11:26 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

How would I ever explain the sky?''


only you can lovely lady....what a stunning vision, to read....see and take in....


sweet

hugsss


Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

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Lovely word pictures in your sky and from your porch.

Such a pretty sunrise that you wrote~
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just a beautiful piece of art here!
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9 posted 03-10-2003 04:40 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh JM, this is absolutely beautiful.. speechless am I.

Maree
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wonderful images and wonderful words to grace them...
very well done Ms Mothy One...
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you whisper the words for me Jan...someday you just may trip over me asleep on your porch.

This reminded me of Emily SO much...

I'm watching a moth take wing and I smile.

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Why cant I be content to just witness the wonder?
Couldn't it be enough to frame the moment on film?
Shouldn't I be satisfied with making a memory in my mind?
From where comes this cadenced coerce to capture the scene
in metered verse or rhyme scheme?


She did it, she did it, OMG she did it, she did it!

You promised a poem...
and you kept your promise...
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Janet,
you asked a tough question...i have no opinions to offer but am real glad to read of your struggle....enjoy your venture into free verse too..

[This message has been edited by kaile (03-10-2003 07:14 AM).]

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er, library...
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Thank God that with our eyes we can view the beauty of nature...and for those that can't a verbal description will do...made me think of a scene in the French movie "Amelie" where she took a blind man on a mini tour of the City in which she beautifully described the sights she was seeing...James
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JM,
If you could you would and almost did.
But each sky is printed different in each mind. Some see glory some see story, some see awe and some see floor. And I see you.
WWRS
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Janet Marie, have I told you that you're one of my favorite writers here? Your poems are not only breath-taking, but your pictures are, too...and your replies to everybody else are so poetic. You are a very talented lady, dear friend.  

Hugs, Ethel
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nice
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As if alliterated adjectives could ever be adequate ...

But... but... but... they're so pretty to read, even when they're not quite doing the job. *G* And in this case, they painted the mind's canvas as gloriously as the camera captured the moment. *S* Excellent work!
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20 posted 03-10-2003 11:56 AM       View Profile for DarkSide_Blues   Email DarkSide_Blues   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkSide_Blues

How can I convey the beauty you instilled in my mind with those words? The word "beauty" itself is such an understatement, it's akin to pointing at a mountain and saying "grain of sand". Amazing....
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Yep, it's a poem!  And with pictures!  I'll be back...
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Thanks to God you tried ... and all the poets will try again and again ... to capture precious fragments of the overwhelming magnificent mosaic that is creation.
Beautiful.
Margherita
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‘I should lay down my pen ...
rather than do this view an inked injustice.
Words both pale and fail when compared
to dawn's dance upon day.’

Already told ya that I really like this verse.  Sets the stage honestly and poetically.    Love ‘inked injustice’ and the up front admission of feeling daunted by the task at hand.  

‘And here I sit in my room with a view ...
searching for words to convey what the
sky shares in it's dawning display.’

Just like the image of ‘here I sit in my room with a view…’

‘How would I resonate the reds ... orchestrate the orange?
To pen in pinks and purples couldn't come close to painting
upon creation's canvas. To write of violet hued views or
horizons of blue, could never do such brilliance true.’

Pretty much nailed this verse, worked really well, I thought.  

‘How would hand written lines define the sun in shine?
Such splendor shouldn't be restricted by rhyme. ‘

Exactly!  Free verse would work much better…lol!

‘Why cant I be content to just witness the wonder?
Couldn't it be enough to frame the moment on film?
Shouldn't I be satisfied with making a memory in my mind?
From where comes this cadenced coerce to capture the scene
in metered verse or rhyme scheme?’

From a writers heart and soul.  From you!  Ya done good Jams.  Give yourself a cookie!  
Janet Marie
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24 posted 03-10-2003 09:32 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I was unexpectally called away today, but I wanted to say thank you to ALL before it got any later...your wonderful responses to this make a moth smile like the cheshire cat

I appreciate your generous support of my work more than my mere moth words will tell true...I'll try to come back to this and say thanks to each when I get caught up here.

thanks again guys....muchly.

    
peace & poetry

 
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