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Open Poetry #25

Mirror Finish (REVISED)

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2003-03-08 04:09 PM

(Revisted From prior version, I do not know it is better or worse)

A stone rippled smooth;
a mirror finish.
Polished from years of abuse,
hiding an opposite side,
resisting change in darkness.

A boulder in the face of onslaughts.
Sandblasted from jagged edges,
a rough cut of what it was.
Still resisting
but dislodged it will show
its course side of determination.

In molten rock,
all boundaries have been lost.
Moisture determining its new form
with a crust, it resists again.
As the tides crash into it,
carving out its initials.

So a diamond in earth’s womb,
precious in its unflawed creation.
So crystal clear, having no impurity.
Dislodged to the surface
from a million year sleep.
In a precision cut, a jeweler will do
what nature dared not
Putting a mirror finish on all sides

Thought: Writing is a rough cut of life being polished by years of experience but the flaws will never let you finish typing.

D.Lester Young 2/23/2003
Tuscaloosa, AL
Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry)

[This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (03-08-2003 04:12 PM).]

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-03-08 06:13 PM

Beautiful imagery

Cold hands means a warm heart

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-03-08 11:06 PM

D - irony at its best - good writing here xxoo

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

3 posted 2003-03-09 02:00 AM

great rewrite!

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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4 posted 2003-03-09 05:23 PM

Fantastic piece of writing, D.Lester!

rkcraig
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since 2003-02-27

Posts 202
Cincinnati, Ohio, USA

5 posted 2003-03-09 05:24 PM

wonderful message

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