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Does Your Love Melt With The Snow
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Does Your Love Melt With The Snow |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
When winter chills are disappeared When sunlight warms your skin Is it possible you'll forget about me Is this a game you'll win? When I no longer need to warm you Against the harsh, cold air Will you take your hand away from mine Will you forget we stared Into eachother's eyes for hours Getting lost in eachother's souls When your hand no longer trembles cold Will you throw away my role As the one who keeps you warm at night And safe within my arms The one who'll only bring you love And promises no harm? Is this a love you'll soon forget When the sunshine greets your face And the warm air twirls about your hair And the grass is soft as lace... Drifting snow melts into the thirsty ground And yes, I still get lost Inside those hazel planets of eyes Even though there's no more frost. No matter what the season be My love for you shall stay Spring, summer, fall, winter- No matter night or day. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very nicley penned and much enjoyed the read. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you Nancy  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
KoKo, this is beautiful. That last verse is exactly how my Love and I feel...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you Ethel  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hard to say...some get hotter and some get cold...James |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lauren, this is beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry because this is how love should always be and sings with the sparrows in the spring, the warmth of the sun in the summer, the colors in the fall, and as soft as the snow in the winter! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
-nods to James- You're right. I'm just hoping it's not the latter.. Noah: ~hugs!~ I agree. Love shouldn't be temporary, and I'm hoping it won't be. Thank you for your kind words you always shower down! Very much appreciated and cherished. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling... for several reasons... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You write romantically well, as I really enjoyed this one too . |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Beautiful poem Koko. Some loves are the fall and cool into winter until they are so cold they die, others are the spring which heat into summer brilliance. Who can say how long any season shall last... |
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Kristine Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 92Mahal Kita!!! |
Beautiful poem, I loved it!!! Sometimes Love is like awkward poetry, the words may not be just right |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lauren, Very well written. Be positive. Spring is just around the corner and you'll fall in love all over again. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just wonderful! I agree with those before me...and I love this! |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
I Wouldnt change a single word, as It is that well writen! Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like the season shift here. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
A love that endures all seasons.... we can be so lucky. Well expressed, KoKo. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
that's very nice. Eliza Simmons |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Very nice, enjoyed the read. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
FINALLY! I found some more of KOKO's writing. Now I can smile!! Beautiful!! As Always sweetie!   |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Wow...I'm stunned that you all liked this one so much!!! Thanks for all your kind words!!!! You all rock I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very beautiful poem... I like it very much. *S* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
beautiful Charisma |
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Hevnlyfoxy Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 10NYC, NY |
i've finding myself searching for your poems. They are all so beautifully written. Well written... |
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Silver_Tryst Member
since 2003-03-10
Posts 64MT |
Lovely, and beautiful Shayne |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Oh man you guys are so sweet!!!! Thank you all so so so much!!! ~hugs you all!!!!!~ !!I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Oh man you guys are so sweet!!!! Thank you all so so so much!!! ~hugs you all!!!!!~ !!I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
oops! Double post...Sorry bout that! [This message has been edited by KoKo (03-21-2003 09:49 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
KOKO - this was lovely - good luck! xxoo |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Great poem Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
can I vote again? |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Aye... a very nice peace of work. One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful! |
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