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sweetwater
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0 posted 2003-03-08 01:20 AM


with permission...


Living in Los Angeles

I’m up to drinking more than I normally would
I can’t go outside walking through the neighborhood
My morning coffee sitting on a wooden stool
Cup of iced water sat beside the heated swimming pool

Speakers in my ears as the beach goes rolling by.
Shooting hoops in groups, perfect bodies meet my eye
The stars move under the soles of the tourist feet
Red carpet runways show us where the rich and famous meet

There’s nothing like working the bar
One dollar bills in my tip jar
Playing blackjack upon my bed
Burning incense and underfed

Too little sleep and too much wine
I’m finding all of the lost time
Place bets on who can stay awake
sat on the roof until daybreak

Listen to sirens and the paramedic’s horn.
It’s all good in the ‘Wood’, just keep your weapons drawn,
Walk Cent’ry, two blocks East, for dollar Chinese food,
Look at the pavement so my presence isn’t misconstrued.

There’s nothing like working the bar
One dollar bills in my tip jar
Playing blackjack upon my bed
Burning incense and underfed

While shooting pool we drink some beer,
Sublime is on for all to hear.
The Angel’s touched me I believe,
I might depart, I’ll never leave.



© Copyright 2003 Tash - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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1 posted 2003-03-08 01:32 AM



sweetwater - first off - love your name - second this is amazing reminds of RHCP "Under the Bridge" - lovely writing and gives me the feel that Im there xxoo

Dragon Mistress
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2 posted 2003-03-08 01:52 AM


Great poem.  Loved it so much! Its great, it flowed, and I saw me where you discribed!

Tanya

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2003-03-08 02:02 AM


it's a wonderful place...I need to go...great write!
sweetwater
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4 posted 2003-03-08 02:08 AM


littlewing - thankyou.. my name is taken from the first group that performed at Woodstock - not that I was there, but they opened the historic event and not many people remember them.


Thankyou Tanya, glad you liked it.

Passing shadows - yes do go.. I loved living there and was sad to leave.

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2003-03-08 04:17 AM


Enjoyed...James
garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-03-08 04:20 AM


I've always wanted to se California...

Hugs,
Ethel

sweetwater
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7 posted 2003-03-08 12:24 PM


Thanks James...


Go and explore it as soon as you can Ethel, it's well worth the experience  

thanks for reading

Cpat Hair
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8 posted 2003-03-13 02:32 PM


(chuckling).. be honest...OK... I'd rewrite it as free verse... LOL...

like the story you tell...and glad to see you moved this over here... not sure how I missed it when you did..

enjoyed

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