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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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the world outside still veiled in black of mourning (morning) even the sun knows better than to rise this early the weight of another senseless day pins me to bed fetal under blanket warmth I know better than to fight this feel that pierces the heart of I know better than to think this way but old habits die hard when hope doesn't live at all [This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-07-2003 11:36 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph - *pang* that was my chest - my heart just dropped - every day is senseless - get out of that bed and splash in the puddles - I did - it made all the difference in the world - for today anyhow - as always - amazing xxoo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yikes, ditto what littlewing said. But you write it smooth, dude. Ed |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
it does, and I have no doubt you will find it! HUGSSS Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Who is in charge here? Get up and smell the coffee ~indulge yourself.  I hate to read you so down Raph~ Smile some~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Don't mind me everybody it's more a pissy mood than depression..thanks everyone for reading and replying appreciate it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well I sure know about those pissy moods... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
obviously pissy moods are good for ur writing raph. morning has broken, and so has my desire to live. lol. this goes thru my head every day. despise 6am. grrrrrr.  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Shoot, I should have responded to this poem when I first got up... but I would have ruined a good melancholy...  I enjoy your writing, Raph... don't stop, whatever your mood! |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
those were perfectly explained emotions and felt by all from time to time :-) and, trust me, Dixie can give you advice *ducking* LOL! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
get up, kick someones today.. [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-09-2003 12:31 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
lol @ KristieSue and inkedgoddess too |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Nice poem.. Enjoyed. Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Raphael, I too know this weighing feeling, sweet friend, it is not pleasant and I hope now you have found this hope and have the courage and smile to rise out of that bed without hesitation! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Dixie they're ssssssssssooooo much fun aren't they? Gemma thanks I think it's inhuman to have to be awake before 11 am Thanks Karilea appreciate it Thanks Kristie Sue Mish too much work to lift my leg..my god you can't say @$$? I think they even say it on sesame street by now Thanks Connel Noah thanks but unless i win the lottery or am being visited by lingerie models getting up at 6am can never be a happy thing |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
... it depends on when you went to sleep! You see, to get up, IS A HAPPY THING! ... but let's give it an hour or two more, so that HOPE can keep the pace. Very well written. Definitivamente molto piacevole, ci riconosciamo tutti! Love, Margherita |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know this poem like I know the walls of my own crypt that I creep into at that hour... even in gloom, you manage to make me smile. Loved this Raph. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Another gripping vignette from one of our best. Glad I borrowed a computer for a bit, and dropped into PIP... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I know better than to think this way but old habits die hard when hope doesn't live at all I understand this Raph. Always a pleasure reading you ,aree. [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-08-2003 07:16 PM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
please, dont even get me started........... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
glad you did vandana Thank you Margherita but when you wake up at 6am on a snowy day to get through traffic to a job you hate..its no good K ah love to make you smile..hugs Thanks ratleader and the feeling is mutual when i read yours Thanks Maree always a pleasure to see you here Mish i won't they'd just censor us both.. |
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