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LastMoments
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0 posted 2003-03-07 03:37 PM



No More ~~Title

How many times-
Do I have to spill my heart
Paint my grief inside
Make the walls cry and break
In exchange for a smile
How many times-
Do I have to sit weeping
Letting my eyes erase the image
That walks before me like a ghost
But is never truly there
How many times-
Do I have to mark my hate
Live through there torn scars
Of emotion that preludes the end
That makes my path to walk
How many times-
Do I wait for times to change
But it sits in frozen frame
Never in alter, permanent
Like each days moments swallowed
How many times-
Do I have to say I give up
That there is no more

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-03-07 03:45 PM


Perhaps you will be ahead if you cut your losses now. There does not appear to be much joy in this relationship.

This was a very moving and emotional read.

Sending you lots of pink loving light to mend your hurting heart...

Earth Angel

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2003-03-07 06:33 PM


LastMoments - sad write but told well. Perhaps to let go, and start anew. Best to you...

BC

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
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3 posted 2003-03-07 08:27 PM


... "each days moments swallowed" .. love this ...
how many times? You say it: no more!
Well written.
Margherita

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
4 posted 2003-03-07 08:34 PM



LastMoments,

Deeply felt. A good write. I never know if the poem is a current personal experience. In either case,

Heart hugs to you, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

icequeen
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since 2001-12-09
Posts 633
FL USA
5 posted 2003-03-07 08:59 PM


How well I relate to this... this is an emotional, drawing-in piece. Loved it.
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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6 posted 2003-03-07 11:26 PM


Last Moments - right - I ask myself this often - but somehow we keep trudging along - one day though . . . lovely xxoo
passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2003-03-08 02:22 AM


I know what you mean here! trust me, you're not alone...good write
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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8 posted 2003-03-08 05:31 AM


Sometimes giving up can relate to other things...like acceptance, or moving on, or looking at the situation differently.  James
garysgirl
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9 posted 2003-03-08 06:08 AM


If this is concerning your own relationship, I hope that you make the right decision for you....

Hugs,
Ethel

Albert J. Allie
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 512
Queens NY
10 posted 2003-03-08 09:35 AM


I was right there with you! I have been many times in that same place you have just taken us too! Great read!
Smile...
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