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LastMoments
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0 posted 2003-03-07 01:00 AM



Thousand Words in the Wind

I've often found myself
Staring into eternal
As my eyes ran away in the night
And tripped on burning stars

My voice traveled like wind
With grace it traveled on
Caressing your face
Telling you everything I couldn't say

My heart burns with anguish
Chains dangle by the tip
Falling to smaller atmosphere
Still it beats alone

The silence of the night
The whispers of the wind
That hym the thousand words I search
To tell you how I feel

To show you who I am, whats felt.

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1 posted 2003-03-07 06:33 AM



Welcome to Passions!  I enjoyed reading
your first offering, and hope that you
will look around, get to know us, and
feel at home very soon.  Please, check
your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

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2 posted 2003-03-07 06:53 AM




Last Moments,

Welcome. A pretty first post. I like this line especially:

"Telling you everything I couldn't say"

Well written and look forward to reading more of your poetry.

Hugs, Pat

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        "Desiderata"

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3 posted 2003-03-07 07:43 AM


I've often found myself
Staring into eternal
As my eyes ran away in the night

great opening lines...

I enjoyed...

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4 posted 2003-03-07 09:10 AM




(big hugggssssss) I can understand this feeling ever so well and I believe we all are every now and then, but here, you never have to be shy because you are surrounded by brothers and sisters in spirit who all share these poetic values with you, this is a wonderful debut, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2003-03-07 09:14 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Much enjoyed your first post.
I shall look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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6 posted 2003-03-07 09:18 AM


LastMoments
Welcome and enjoyed the read.

GG
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7 posted 2003-03-07 09:49 AM


staring into eternal... what a calming and yet discomforting thought. I love it!
Wonderful first post, I really can't wait to read more.
Welcome to the Blue Pages!! I'm sure you'll love it here

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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8 posted 2003-03-07 09:53 AM



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9 posted 2003-03-08 03:51 AM



Last Moments - good job - nice writing here - Welcome to PIP!  xxoo

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10 posted 2003-03-08 03:53 AM


this is good! Welcome to Passions!
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11 posted 2003-03-08 07:32 AM


I really enjoyed your first post and look forward to
reading more of your work. I hope you like it here at PIP, and



Hugs, Ethel....garysgirl

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12 posted 2003-03-08 08:08 AM


WELCOME!!!!

great job!



[This message has been edited by KristieSue (03-08-2003 08:13 AM).]

Albert J. Allie
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13 posted 2003-03-08 09:28 AM



I know the feeling of being shy. I have missed out on plenty because of it! Welcome and this was a great read!

Martie
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14 posted 2003-03-08 09:59 AM


LastMoments

"As my eyes ran away in the night
And tripped on burning stars"

I know how it feels to be shy...you have written it beautifully!  Welcome to passions!


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15 posted 2003-04-04 11:39 AM


you certainly aren't shy about expressing yourself ....enjoyed these lines especially

As my eyes ran away in the night
And tripped on burning stars

belated welcome to passions...keep up the good work!

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