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etherealdreams
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0 posted 2003-03-06 10:16 PM



this life sublime
within and inbetween itself
reveals its rhythmic phases
as the clock winds down again

flaunting staunch repercussions
for actions shadowing misgivings
the medium is key
lets waste not the hour
for ours are surrounded with
a certain sanctity

from allies to foes to piteous rivals
overthrown we can seek the secrets soon enough
this puzzle with its ins and outs
renders ground for well rounded
people to place their pieces complacently

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-03-06 10:42 PM



Ethereal, there is a lot more in this piece that first hits the eye...if one reads slowly, it hits the soul...very good! Welcome to Passions!  Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

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the_loner_23
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2 posted 2003-03-06 10:59 PM


Wonderful first piece. Welcome to Passions!!!!!

Cold hands means a warm heart

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3 posted 2003-03-06 11:21 PM


Welcome to Passions!!!!
A very, very good write. I lok forward to reading more...

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4 posted 2003-03-07 01:40 AM


Welcome to PIP. I enjoyed your first post and hope to read more of your work....
Ethel.....garysgirl

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5 posted 2003-03-07 01:39 PM


A very well written first post, I enjoyed it.  Welcome to Passions!
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6 posted 2003-03-07 01:42 PM




(sad sigh) There is obviously no complacency going on right now, we might as well omit that word from our vocabularies until we finally wise up and realize exactly how we should be, this is a powerful debut, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Robert Frazier
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7 posted 2003-03-07 01:58 PM


strong first post!  fitting sentiment for the land of 'Passions'

Rf

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-03-08 03:53 AM


ethereal - nice writing - excellent wording here - Welcome to PIP!  xxoo
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9 posted 2003-03-08 03:54 AM


perfectly done!
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