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sperarifraai
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since 2003-03-06
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0 posted 2003-03-06 08:46 PM


Late evening and the sweet peace hit my soul
All around me losing ourselves
Intense room and dark light
You come to take a peak
But take a last step

You shut the door
It’s vibrant, intense
Your nobody and it feels good
No need to breath
Other forces are keeping you alive

These new hours it doesn’t matter
For these lost hours don’t worry
They don’t even exist
I got a little piece of heavan
Walking hand in hand
Flirting with temptation

But you love me and leave me
And when you leave I’m empty
I crumble to pieces and fade away
You leave me so empty


Sperari

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JamesMichael
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2 posted 2003-03-10 04:32 PM


Nice writing...James
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3 posted 2003-03-10 04:58 PM


I like the way you move from anticipation to emptiness... good transition! *S*
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