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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2003-03-06 02:51 PM




You’ve set me on this course I fear
and try your best to keep me here
What right have you to decide my fate
it’s time you learned I just won’t wait

You push me once against the wall
I feel the slide, watch me fall
I run away but you find me still
freedom beckons if I find the will

Closer to the open door I find
you’ve blocked my path, I turn, I’m blind
back at the top, back at the start
I take a breath, steel my heart

Quickly dodging first left then right
I will leave this place tho I must fight
I scream, you turn and suddenly
I slip out the door and I am free


**
This was a challenge to write a poem from the perspective of a pinball. Oddly, it took on a life of it's own and can be read as a poem about abuse. I like when that happens except I wonder who's writing who here? LOL


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EagleScorpion
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1 posted 2003-03-06 03:04 PM


i have a question..

you havent been listening to The Who anytime recently, have you?

Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble
remembering how to fly.

garysgirl
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2 posted 2003-03-06 03:16 PM


Sharon, you find just the right words to write on any subject.....(Or whoever writes it??)  

Thanks for sharing your talent with us, Sharon.
Hugs,
Ethel

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3 posted 2003-03-06 04:17 PM


excellent Sharon ... enjoyed
Aenimal
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4 posted 2003-03-06 04:42 PM


Gee Sharon here i thought i'd been playing a game..if i'd have known I was contributing to the abuse of small silver pinballs I would never have touched those flippers..forgive me?
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2003-03-06 05:14 PM


Thank you all for reading!! Maybe I should start a 'Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Pinballs"?
wandering glider
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6 posted 2003-03-06 05:21 PM


had it not been in the title, i would never have guessed
very interesting development
fun to follow along when it writes itself, isn't it?

Pilgrimage
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7 posted 2003-03-06 05:23 PM


Oh, I like this one. I can be read from so many different perspectives. Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-03-07 10:51 PM


Sharon - I thought it was about abuse as well - I love when poetry does that - like to have similar meanings awesome TY
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9 posted 2003-03-07 10:55 PM


very very cool... love the double illusion.
It would take me a year to come up with the perspective of a pinball LOL
You did great!

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Corinne
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10 posted 2003-03-07 10:55 PM


Hey, pinball queen!

Seriously though, what a tough challenge!

Core

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11 posted 2003-03-08 03:04 AM


very good writing! I enjoyed!
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