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Open Poetry #25

There's a place

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-03-06 10:09 AM

Theres a place
when my eyes are seeing grey
theres a something that lives
in forgotten tears resting place

but i know it
and i do follow
to green paths falling beneath hazard
beyond til death

round becomes sharp line
despite my cirles
my vison sways zig zag
its no secret i'm behind

theres a place
when my eyes stop seeing grey
and i retrace my steps
there are statues over covered ground.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

[This message has been edited by gemjop (03-06-2003 11:20 AM).]

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

1 posted 2003-03-06 10:54 PM

certain places we only know, our own greys
out there, i can relate,
i liked this, not sure if i put my own spin on or not, but it reached inside me

GavinKidd
Junior Member

since 2003-02-14

Posts 44
NH

2 posted 2003-03-06 11:50 PM

This is really great,

round becomes sharp line
despite my cirles
my vison sways zig zag
its no secret i'm behind

this part I really liked.
Excellent work.

Kidd

Keep your plans secret for now.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-03-06 11:52 PM

my eyes are seeing purple is that a bad thing..oh jeez i need some sleep. lovely gemma as always

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-03-07 01:02 AM

Gemma, a beautiful and well-written poem.
Very good, Lady.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

5 posted 2003-03-08 09:07 AM

Hi gemjop,

I first saw where you were from and then read your poetry, this brought me in to your work and enjoying it much, I loved your word use.

Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

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