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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-03-06 06:50 AM


dark angel justice
allowances
of the ghosts
they come knock on my brain
quicksilver holding
liquid--I scold you--
letting you pattern my pain...

always so different
(I hear refrain)
raindrops in measure of then.
Give me a reason
a sharp edge of tin
tell me why I'd try again...

I'll drift a down slowly
and you give me vein
of a pulse
giving meat to my teeth.
grifting life lowly
dulling...belief,
to make up for
the lack of me...

let me chew gristle
of all thought of you
give me the fog
of all that you seem.
I skirt the thistle
of meadow-sharp dew
and digging the burrs
drawing blood from my knees...

tell me you love me...


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-06-2003 07:11 AM).]

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gemjop
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Pencilveinia, USA
1 posted 2003-03-06 07:20 AM


Karen, ladydeee, you're the best!
keeping this.

Cpat Hair
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Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-03-06 07:30 AM


ah.... to be told is often the things we bloody ourselves over the worst...

nicely done my friend.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-03-06 07:59 AM


dark angel justice
allowances
of the ghosts
they come knock on my brain
quicksilver holding
liquid--I scold you--
letting you pattern my pain...

always so different
(I hear refrain)
raindrops in measure of then.
Give me a reason
a sharp edge of tin
tell me why I'd try again...

==============================
ahh my cryptic queen of symbolism and metaphor..my princess of personif...
my Ra-goddess of rhyme
you rock and it rolls me
The moth loves ya and she'll tell ya, does that count? *L*

    
peace & poetry

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2003-03-07 10:09 PM



K - this one aches - always singing - always dancing - your words they touch my soul -

Give me a reason
a sharp edge of tin
tell me why I'd try again...

xxoo

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
5 posted 2003-03-07 10:17 PM


serenity blaze - witch of the cypress, out of the mist she comes with words as these. The mist rises as your words touch...

BC

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
6 posted 2003-03-07 10:23 PM


That's getting down to the nitty gritty Serenity~
I'm speechless.....yowser!

You be the good witch~

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
7 posted 2003-03-07 10:26 PM


*smiling  here*
Yur so good!
Hugs YOU!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Kielo
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since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109

8 posted 2003-03-07 10:29 PM


I am going to return to this when my brain isn't fried, because I love it.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

icequeen
Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633
FL USA
9 posted 2003-03-07 10:51 PM


eeeeeeeeeegads this is spellbinding stuff...
ohhh to have a mind like yours! I get chills reading it. Beautifully done.

the only man worth your tears will never make you cry

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
10 posted 2003-03-07 10:57 PM


serenity...yes, you got the words and the soul, love where you go.  
Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
11 posted 2003-03-07 11:08 PM


I know I love you Grins and hugs

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-07-2003 11:08 PM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
12 posted 2003-03-08 02:56 AM


I always find myself with mouth falling open when I read you
serenity blaze
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13 posted 2003-03-08 06:35 AM


this one was kind of special to me so I thank you all much...

was trying for a bit of the Celtic....

hugs, all.

mmmmyummies.

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