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The Curse of the Dead
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The Curse of the Dead |
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Aceo Fathi Junior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 17Anchorage, AK |
I wish I could escape this feeling I know I shouldn't hate but really if he hadn't killed them I would still be dreaming but for now my life is a nightmare The curse of the dead this feeling of dread these feelings that are kept bottled up inside this feeling of dread is stuck in my head I know he must be feeling this way too ---------------------------------------------------- This was a really good first poem, and I thought it needed to be submitted for the book!  Pretty good, huh?I learned how to write from a friend of mine. Sometimes I think the student has surpassed the teacher :darklol: |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I really liked the way you described your feelings. It gets my vote. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Aceo Fathi Junior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 17Anchorage, AK |
yeah... ever1 liked it the first tim eI posted it, and I realy think it should be pusblished I learned how to write from a friend of mine. Sometimes I think the student has surpassed the teacher :darklol: |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Aceo, this is indeed a very poignant emotional outpouring from the heart, sweet friend, all poetry that is honest has value and this would work great in Reflections as it reflects the angst felt here, I send angel hugs of healing and my vote your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aceo, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aceo Fathi Junior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 17Anchorage, AK |
You can never post a short, concise, reply, can you? Just kidding, thanx for the vote! I learned how to write from a friend of mine. Sometimes I think the student has surpassed the teacher :darklol: |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have to echo Noah's response for the angst in this poem is felt for sure. Nicely done. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep, pretty good |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Aceo - the killing of dreams - related to this one - felt this one - good luck - my friend xxoo very nice |
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